THAT'S FUNNY I'M IN LONDON?

I wanted a Monty Python-ish twist at the end

Its evening in London.

On opening the inn window

Overlooking wet cobble stone streets

My senses engulfed, damp cold air.

The light of street lamps

Shine through clouds of fog.

The smell of burning coal from chimneys above

Permeates the nostrils.

Horse drawn carriages, Clip Clop Clip Clop down narrow streets

Gentlemen in tall black hats

Whose faces you cannot see

Stand under lamp posts.

While exhaling their mist the fog feeds.

Ladies shuffle, quickly in the shadows

Through the darkened crowds.

Suddenly A shriek!

A scream of terror and cries.

"Let me go! Let me go!"

Police whistles start to blow.

Then shining in the light I see it!.

A glimmering, shiny ,tapered knife in my view!  Oh no! Its Jack the Ripper!

Meanwhile in my hotel room

In the corner,

The vacant rocking chair slowly,

rocks and rocks and then...............

Stop! Stop! Lets cut this read

Oops! sorry My readers I really am

I know....I had you worried. I was too.

I just had a bad dream. You see!

Back to sleep everyone!

I shall too!

Happy thoughts everyone. Sweet dreams too!

Reviews

[ANTO]

A well told tale with great imagery of 'Old London Town' Andrew - I love anything to do with that era. I could have stayed longer but you woke up !! Soon sort that - together now lets count back from: 10...9...8...7...6...5...4...3...2...1...sleeeeeep

Great prank at the end Andrew ! :)

[Willard Wells]

Nice fun work and I like the end. Well done my friend.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Willard and for your time and with time I shall return the views my friend!

[Willard Wells]

Everything in it's time just as a fine wine. i do not stress or hold judgement on my fellow man.

[andrew mitchell]

Its just a busy time and its so damm hot here Five days of over forty degrees! And No air con lol!

[Willard Wells]

No AC sounds like a personal problem, but I feel your pain. Of course we are on the other side of weather with cold. I expect your heat now and the heat we will see next summer will be of the El Nino variety.

[jesserose99]

enjoyed this one too...but I always enjoy your work Andrew. I could really place myself there until you woke up!! Then I was gone..lol , no really, uber creative. nice work

[andrew mitchell]

thank you kind Jesse, it was just a mad fun write to lure the reader then the twist lol:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Interesting with an accurate description of London in 'The 'Rippers' day. I thought it read a little Edgar Allan Poe with the rocking chair, until the final stanza where I at first thought it was the making of a movie and then finally a dream lol

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks John it was a fun write!

[GreenEyedPoet]

What a tease! Lol. I got all into the poem and then you threw a twist at the end, very clever. :)

[~]

Ahh, again.. clever twist. I liked the pictures that pushed through my mind and built up a scene for a movie that may continue in sleep :)

[Valentine]

Nothing like a dream of olden times to give you a jolt out of that bed. Valentine

[Gee]

Sweet.Enjoying the story and then the twist thrown in at the end.Good write Andrew.

[alf]

Hi Andrew. I sooo love a story with a twist. Yep, you got me. I had just reached the point of wondering whether and how you would get involved, and whammo . . . reality! Loved this one, alf

[sereenaoutloud]

lol very clever and witty and a total tease! hahah loved the end. Living up to your name TTM! lol