ASHES TO ASHES

She looks back now with one regret.

Having tried that first cigarette.

To satisfy her starving mind

As the rest of her body slowly declines

And while the intimacy shared was oh so dear,

The cancerous growth began to appear.

So she cried for help for friend was foe-----A dreaded curse!

But too late now, her body's taken by the hearse.

For each smoke exhaled was her spirit in the air

To be free at last without need or despair.

And no longer will her mind be fed

As the cold earth now remains her bed.

Reviews

[zunie frost]

such a thought provoking piece of work !!!! well done

[jesserose99]

I sent you something on this but wanted to add just how remarkable I thought this was...I haven't smoked by the way since my poem...so, when was that the 26th of Nov. So your poem in it's sadness is inspiring to me too.

[McBear]

This was very deep. I loved how you showed the danger of what cigarettes cause without like shoving it into the faces of the readers. Very well done!

[Jamestown]

Fantastic writing, much truth and reality!
Smoking kills, I sad but true! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[alf]

WOW! how do you feel about that????

[alf]

Hi Andrew. This is good! Might I give one suggestion. to increase the impact of the statement, a space lines 7 and 8 would allow pause for the words to penetrate the reader before they continue reading. Just a suggestion, see what you think. This sends a strong message, one I hope will impact on more youthful readers who have time to avoid the effects of smoking, alf

[Gee]

Nice write,sad end for her,great last two lines.