A text is the new black

A text is the new black

A Poem by alyssa whelan
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A free verse poem describing how I feel after a recent heart break.

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I sit and wait all day.

All i  want is a text from that one person.

Its honestly like a drug because once I saw their name pop up I felt so good.

Some people take drugs to feel better

And When people say drugs, they think of heroin or crack.

But my type of drug is seeing your 6 lettered name show up on my screen.

And the more i think of it, i realize how messed up that is.

I mean it is better than snorting crack but come on.

Letting you into my life was the worst mistake ever

Everything was so picture perfect

I got so hype when i saw your name on my phone screen

Everyday i felt good because of you

But then you stopped completely

It was like taking a drug addicts drugs away from them and locking them in a room with nothing

...Cold turkey

And now you are back but for the wrong reasons

You say one thing but really, you mean the opposite

I fall back to the old ways

Me sitting and waiting for the notification to go off

How could i be so stupid?

I should have known that it was too good to be true

But after all of this, your silence hurts more than a text back.

© 2016 alyssa whelan


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This is very real, honest and very much a reality today. I can feel that.
Have you written a lot of poetry? Since you have asked perhaps consider using the passive voice more and focusing on the important phases, instead of creating full sentences. If you are interested, I can give some examples.
A piece with so much heart behind it.


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Hello Alyssa,

My name is Guillermo Rodriguez, and really enjoyed this poem. I like the comparisons you made from the text to the drugs. I also believe when we get attached to someone, it becomes like a "drug." I learned this from experience too. Also, I have a poem similar to yours; but just in my own perspective of things. You should check it out, its called "Ungrateful Broad."

Posted 8 Years Ago


It's alright. It's new. Like, it doesn't sound old fashioned. Stuff like this often sounds as though it's all been painted with the same brush, so caution yourself against that.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is very real, honest and very much a reality today. I can feel that.
Have you written a lot of poetry? Since you have asked perhaps consider using the passive voice more and focusing on the important phases, instead of creating full sentences. If you are interested, I can give some examples.
A piece with so much heart behind it.


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think you have just described your addiction in a beautiful way

I love it , yes, its the new Drugs
I would add to that , people that waits for "Likes" , people that waits for reviews (here..)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 29, 2016
Last Updated on May 29, 2016
Tags: love, heartbreak, drugs