The Dam Break

I made this story in my room think what would i do if this ever happened

 I didn't feel well that day .So My mom was taking care of me. I ran out of
medicine so she went to the store to get me some more medicine .Soon after i hear cars crashing and felt the
house shaking .I tried to call my mom but the phone lines were
down. So ran up stairs and look out my window to see what had happen... my town flooded. The houses were drifting away.My
house began to move so I climbed out of the window the water was very
cold.I swam to a dresser i saw floating.I climbed up on it and screamed
my mothers name.I couldn't help the fact that she was gone.I know
everything that I ever saw or was going to see was gone and was never coming
back. I took out a drawer from the dresser and began to paddle with it .The water
was so hard to pull. I was ready to give up .I couldn't take it anymore.I
mean even if I do survive I have nothing to live for ...Then a boat I saw
a boat I yelled as loud as I could "hey over here". The boat came for
me .I was saved. The people gave me food, warmth   anything i needed . I was with those people for a month
they were the only people I had they were my new family now.

Reviews

[Davi Rodrigues]

That is one very interesting text. You picked an unusual theme, and that shows daring and creativity. Congratulations.
I would recommend better proof-reading, though. There are many punctuation mistakes that could make it hard to understand the story, and verb tense mistakes, too.

[SheActsLikeSummer]

This was very interesting. I enjoyed the plot and the overall theme of the story. It could do with more description though. More emotion. Make the reader be there with you. Have them float in the water along side 'you', make them feel what 'you' feel. About loosing 'your' mother, having 'your' town flooding. Transport us. Anyway, great write, I enjoyed it.