Disposable

I love you.
You love me,
I know.
But a brutal reality.
To find out
After so much time
You view me
Differently
Than I do you.
I am disposable,
Just toss me aside,
Like an empty soda can.
Take me or leave me
You say it doesn’t matter,
By yourself, you’d be happier.
The words eat at me
Like acid.
I sink, falling, nowhere
To turn….
Spinning with confusion
Burning with pain.
My world is changed
In a single moment,
A single phrase.

Reviews

[Twilight]

Basically, a woman can really lose her self-esteem, following a relationship in which she has been treated badly or simply "used". It seems, that the writer feels strongly about this kind of theme, and has expressed her thoughts quite clearly.

The flow and rhyme scheme are not particularly good here, but the writer has expressed her point of view rather well. Indeed, there is nothing which could be misunderstood, or deemed to be ambiguous in meaning.

Interestingly, whilst reading, it seemed as if the protagonist's mind was in a state of angst and turmoil. No doubt, this is just what the writer intended.

Pretty good writing, Lauren! Your first submission to my Group (so far), "Twilight's Disciples", and you are perfectly welcome to add more!

[shandi]

Not all people are like that, but it seems youve found one that brought out a great piece of poetry in you. Ive been this person, the one doing the tossing, and you learn thats not the person you want to be. There are better people out there.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh My God that is really a harsh thing to learn... when the one you are with doesn't think it matters if you come or go... not much can be harder on the heart. A raw piece of writing that certainly gives just how harsh life can be in the blink of an eye.