Disposable

I love you.
You love me,
I know.
But a brutal reality.
To find out
After so much time
You view me
Differently
Than I do you.
I am disposable,
Just toss me aside,
Like an empty soda can.
Take me or leave me
You say it doesn’t matter,
By yourself, you’d be happier.
The words eat at me
Like acid.
I sink, falling, nowhere
To turn….
Spinning with confusion
Burning with pain.
My world is changed
In a single moment,
A single phrase.

Reviews

[Twilight]

Basically, a woman can really lose her self-esteem, following a relationship in which she has been treated badly or simply "used". It seems, that the writer feels strongly about this kind of theme, and has expressed her thoughts quite clearly.

The flow and rhyme scheme are not particularly good here, but the writer has expressed her point of view rather well. Indeed, there is nothing which could be misunderstood, or deemed to be ambiguous in meaning.

Interestingly, whilst reading, it seemed as if the protagonist's mind was in a state of angst and turmoil. No doubt, this is just what the writer intended.

Pretty good writing, Lauren! Your first submission to my Group (so far), "Twilight's Disciples", and you are perfectly welcome to add more!

[Ralphy]

Oh my this is a powerful poem, the words that reflect grapples the heart, soul and leaves one with an empty feeling...

[Stacey Watts]

So many times we feel this way by someone else. But the truth is we are not. Very well written. Great way to express the heartache. You are very talented.

[Pax Analog]

Plain-spoken, vivid.

I have no doubt you are better than "Disposable," whether literal or a fictive "I."

The poem refers to a situation when not all the major centers of heart-mind-body are symbiotically aligned -- always a challenge in relationships, and all the more reason to bond at as CONSCIOUS level as possible. It's not only more fulfilling that way, but obviates taking cheap hits. Never any guarantees, of course. I just always advocate self-respect and insight over need, because the latter lead ALWAYS gets messy later.

To the extent this burning pain of confusion is your own, embrace the fire proactively and the romantic-sexual stars are more likely to align in your favor next round.

As a poem, this piece is striking in its focus on the life-changing power of a single word or phrase.

[Drew Wade]

I loved this poem. It was so good, and your imagery was so spot on. I also like how you divided the lines. The only thing i wasn't sure about was how you punctuated things, but that's beside the point if that's what you were going for... this is a good good good thing.

[Yuvia Chairez]

"My world is changed
In a single moment,
A single phrase.."

This is the most powerful part of a poem that twists emotions like a hurricane.

[Dianah]

Ouch. I thought this was going to be an eco poem but was pleasantly surprised. You describe these emotions well and sum it up well in the last few lines.

'My world is changed
In a single moment,
A single phrase.'

Dianah

[Rockebah]

It is true that a single phrase by the one we love can tear us apart.
This poem is extremely relatable and I love how you capture the hurt, pain and betrayal in the poem. Beautifully written

[Rylan Batten]

Intense, with good imagery. The short lines give it a sort of urgency. Good job, I liked it.

[Michael X]

In a single moment, single prhase, to give credence to the confusion that leaves the heart in turmoil
like a portrait locket with a worn out image. And the passionate way your words project a cascading flow in prose equal to the powerful emotions rendered as distressing honesty. A creatively great poem of romance and the darker shades that paint life experience.