Wounding

What does love taste like?

If you really want to kill me,

shoot me your best goodbye.

Put one bullet on my heart

and a second one in the skies.

 

Then look into my eyes

and say the name of other guy.

 

Touch my hand,

just to feel the beats of my heart. 

Kiss me for a last time,

just to feel the coldness of bye-bye.

 

How bitter can be the night,

just hearing

a wounded love cry

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Richard Patrick]

That was very well written, it expresses the emotions that you are feeling?
Your poem allows us to see what you are feeling. Maybe the person who did this too you did not realize what you are feeling.

I too have lost a woman who I thought loved me. The tale has to be written to allow us know how you are feeling. Now, you must lift yourself up from the quagemire where you are at. Dust yourself off and begin again.

[Adriancito Lupus Centeno]

Thanks Richard for commenting. Definitely, you are right about, loving a woman can be an amazing experience but everything has an end and life goes on. Goodbye, my Friend.

[Richard Patrick]

Take it easy on yourself. LOOK AT WHO YOU ARE? if YOU knew what she saw in you? Look at the fun you had with her. There is all ways someone you can meet. Never give up on yourself.

[Ellen Kolman]

OH my.....I know exactly how this feels but from my perspective...I have been shot in the same way...and it never stops hurting...wonderful poem! I loved it!! truly brilliant use of words creating the feelings in such a poignant way!!! BRAVO

[Philip Muls]

Emotion running deep in your poem. A cry for help. Maybe the last cry.

Well done. Could you read my story Angst, maybe you can relate.

[Dara]

This is a very powerful, emotionally charged write that leaves the reader themselves feeling the shot to the heart. Extremely well written!