Infinite

Always you craved
this infinite knowledge
with a torch in hand you braved
never to be forgotten

Still, you will always be my blood
although you have fallen
i can still feel you
you're the raven watching the horizon

More constantly now i fear
that i may move no longer
my vision has become unclear
im missing my brother

Now you're flown
and no one can stand to watch this
your soul moves on
you have obtained infinite knowledge
someday we will both go
Walking through unknown valleys ever gracefully
i wish you didnt already have to go
but i know you have been set free

Reviews

[Joel Armstrong]

There a few typos here and there and a few grammar mistakes as well. It's 'infinite'.
And it should be 'you're' .I liked the message.to let go of something or someone is hard.but its said,we meet to depart and depart to meet again.
More power to ur pen my friend : )

[Aeon]

Thanks for the input! Be sure to get that fixed up

[Nightfeather]

The writing may be a little distanced to the reader but the message is clear. I have also experienced the struggle of letting go. It is hard on the soul but it is something that must be done in order to move on.

Good job :D

[Pmars]

Good emotion displayed throughout. Only thing I would add is be more descriptive with it. Instead of the reader understanding your emotions, try to make the reader feel those emotions themselves.

[Denisse Atz. Garcia]

I love it that's all I can say. I know nothing about writing so this my not matter, but I do.

[Aeon]

Thanks for reading it!