death 8

The sphere which moves
obeys only time
the heart moves
obeys only time

Everything else
is a sin given from nature
falls to everything else
Never to be explained

Where does the sphere lay its fault
when its crippled and decayed?
Dropping the heart
time, it would no longer obey

The rushing through
beam of light amidst the clouds
may it now come to you
let your love yell so loud
because the sphere that moves
controls the heart with fate
when time becomes nothing
when the heart wont obey

Reviews

[Nightfeather]

Is the sphere some kind of puppeteer which controls our fate and emotions? Is your message to tell us that we are not always in control?
I like this poem a lot and I can feel that you have put much thought in it. The flow is very readable and you have generated a lot of questions in my mind.

Good job :D

[Denisse Atz. Garcia]

I am absolutely no expert in any kind of writing so I don't know if my review even mattered to you, but I like this I interpret it as everything doing what they're told to do until one day they can't and only then are they set free. But again I know nothing and I probably just sound stupid. Anyway keep writing cause I'll keep reading.