Prayer

Inspired by the growing violence in our big cities...

 

Prayer

 

Dear Saint Nicolas

On the 8th day of Creation

Adam and Eve

Were the only pair

Of the Human Kind

 

Though tempted

By the vicious snake

They went and multiplied

As ordered by a Higher Force

Their offspring being in demand

 

Created to the image of

The vengeful Force

Even their sons

Cursed by the

Survival of the fittest

 

Set the tone

For violent mayhem

In the name of the Higher Force

Sending his blessing

For He is the One

The growing Flock

 

Has to follow in

Order to be lead into

Temptation, following

The rat’s path, fastening

Into a race

 

The flock cannot escape

Destined to be part

Of the Human Race

Forever multiplying till

The Day has come

 

They even fail

To fit into the picture

Of violence and mayhem

Were Survival is no option

Only Murder and Rage

Prevail in the Cage

Author's Note

It is not my habit to be inspired by the Bible or by Nicolas (Coppola) Cage for that matter, but both gave me the images I needed to express myself.

Reviews

[Dr. S. D. Blankenship D..]

Very neat miss Hendricks I love the mood and the scene you have placed in this St. Nicolas is one saint I know little about but I know a lot about Saint Thomas, but that's another story. I love the way you wright its nice and clean and you use so much of you brain to tell a story/poem in so little words.

Thanks for posting
~Wa-ya A-di-si

[Larissa G.]

I was fascinated by your mix of scripture ideas and even modern ideas.
You played around with your ideas and your word choice, and I think it paid off. It was a neat, different little piece and I enjoyed it.

[shadadakiya]

very good write if not for evil we would not know good we are like cane and able yeng yangs if not for the pain we would not understand !!sad but true.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh my this is really raw and powerful... what a sad situation at hand but you expressed just n=how devastating and shameful this fighting is in your masterful piece.. excellent work.

[Dizzy-Izzy]

Cain was a farmer and Abel tended flocks. They each brought an offering of the first fruits of their labors. Cains harvest, Abel a lamb. The story goes that God found Abel's lamb, a more acceptable sacrafice. He wasn't so thrilled with Cain's harvest. I don't remember how the message was conveyed. I know that the lamb and the blood carry other signifigance but, this is the first example of sacrafice in the bible and I believe the message is deeper. Everybody knows that Cain killed his brother. The world's first murder, first example of sibling rivalry too I suppose. What are we to learn? What I remember from studying the story is that God did not necessarily require blood from Cain. His fruits were not the problem, it was the attitude with which he offered them, it was the condition of his heart.

I don't know where I was going with this... I thought the story plays so well with what you have written. The beginning of violence, especially toward someone close... I have already made some sacrafices in this area. Thank you for a thought provoking piece...

K

[Kelly Scheppers]

Makes a masterful presentation, and impact!

[Disco writer]

Wow, I like the flow of this, great wright. I am happy to see more people are reading the bible and understanding it in a way of their own, Please do keep writing!


Adam