Prayer

Inspired by the growing violence in our big cities...

 

Prayer

 

Dear Saint Nicolas

On the 8th day of Creation

Adam and Eve

Were the only pair

Of the Human Kind

 

Though tempted

By the vicious snake

They went and multiplied

As ordered by a Higher Force

Their offspring being in demand

 

Created to the image of

The vengeful Force

Even their sons

Cursed by the

Survival of the fittest

 

Set the tone

For violent mayhem

In the name of the Higher Force

Sending his blessing

For He is the One

The growing Flock

 

Has to follow in

Order to be lead into

Temptation, following

The rat’s path, fastening

Into a race

 

The flock cannot escape

Destined to be part

Of the Human Race

Forever multiplying till

The Day has come

 

They even fail

To fit into the picture

Of violence and mayhem

Were Survival is no option

Only Murder and Rage

Prevail in the Cage

Author's Note

It is not my habit to be inspired by the Bible or by Nicolas (Coppola) Cage for that matter, but both gave me the images I needed to express myself.

Reviews

[Dr. S. D. Blankenship D..]

Very neat miss Hendricks I love the mood and the scene you have placed in this St. Nicolas is one saint I know little about but I know a lot about Saint Thomas, but that's another story. I love the way you wright its nice and clean and you use so much of you brain to tell a story/poem in so little words.

Thanks for posting
~Wa-ya A-di-si

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Sorry it took me so long to review. I really enjoyed this. Great write!

[Calypso]

Very true. Now a days all we ever really have is God.

[Cheryl]

Brutally honest ~ which a lot of writers are fearful of. You expressed your point clearly, from a different angle than most probably would.

[MagiCrystal]

A must read Piece.. I love it.. it gives me peace...and also..

They even fail
To fit into the picture
Of violence and mayhem
Were Survival is no option
Only Murder and Rage
Prevail in the Cage

love these line... awesome

[KAREN BROWN]

well this is well written you expessed everything good.I enjoyed the write thank you for sharing this with me.

[Rockebah]

When i read this poem i picture it framed on a wall somewhere. Good job

[Kimberly]

I love the tone of your poetry and this one in particular: gritty and ethereal at the same time. Biblical imagery (which is the ethereal) with urban imagery (rats in a cage). I am not religious at all so I'm afraid some of the references are lost on me, but you still convey the emotion of senseless violence and the inability to escape from that cage. Again, very well written, you are probably my favorite poet on this site and I wonder if you are ever going to publish?

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A very well written poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[poddar kushal]

it is inspiring

[Michael]

Some might call yo a bit cynical with this one, but then they would tend to be the less open-minded ones that refuse to accept thoughts other than their own. I like the Nicolas twist you used. It really works on many levels. I guess what I like best about it is you cut through all the fluffy crap people use to hide life's cruelty and lack of caring.

Very well done.