Babylon

Poem to be entered in the crazy tongues contest, hence the glossary

 

Babylon

 

Two bees try

That is the quest

 

De bitskoemer

Zooming into

The bloom

 

Hook all

Did eek

Nodding

 

To the point

 

The karakol

Is

Open

 

24/7

Angst

 

Eek will

A karakol

 

 

 

Glossary of foreign words, used phonetically in this poem:

Bitskoemer: beach cumber (Antwerp dialect)

Bloom: written bloem in Dutch, means both flower and ... flour.

Hook all: ook al (even) (Dutch)

Eek: ik, meaning I (Dutch)

Nodding: nothing (Antwerp dialect)

Karakol: Turkish, sometimes used to refer to the police station (in some parts of Turkey), in Dutch: an edible snail, sold at street stands or fairs…

Will: Dutch ‘wil’ means ‘want’

Author's Note

Please read the glossary, I used some words from my dialect, my native language and more to write a poem that contains English words which sound phonetically English, but have a totally different meaning in the original language

Reviews

[Kees Kapteyn]

hahah being Dutch i got a kick out of these dutch words! dutch is such a comical language- definitely not romantic , but also not percussive and severe like German. And indeed- in Babylon the punishment for the tower was the many different languages so no one could understand anyone else lol - ja goed, alles goed, groot mooi.

[savdbylove]

it's a very interesting piece and i really like it. i can honestly say that before reading this poem i have never read anything like this before. keep up the good work hun. :)

[poddar kushal]

it was worth the toil over reading

[maiarusm]

This is an enjoyable read, although quite confusing. I had to constantly look back to the glossary and read the meanings. But generally, i found this fun. I also find it aptly named.

[Silent Pacer]

well, at first i didnt notice the glossary, and was a bit confused due to the fact I do not speak dutch, but once I read the meanings I began to really like the piece, it was very amusing to mix native tongues, I really like the concept, and how it could have several different meanings due to this fact... Very well Done.

[Jamie]

I really like the concept of the poem to mean one thing on the surface in English, but to have a deeper meaning in another language. I'm sure this would sound great read aloud, it sounded cool when I read it, I'm sure it would be better read by someone who could actually pronounce everything! :)

[Sparrow]

Wonderful twists on the tongues of the two languages. Beautiful job.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

I'm sure there is some meaning behind this, but with a slow mind like mine...I'm not sure how to review this to be honest. I guess, just lots of luck on the crazy tongues contest! is all i can say.

[Fran Marie]

Beautifully expressed and well penned~THanks for sharing~Fran Marie

[shadadakiya]

well im sorry but that just went right over my head (: