Holy goodness. This is intense. It gave me the chills. The rhyming to it added everything it needed.
"Beauty, it bleeds
from her beautiful face
Her looks, they deceive
she's quite out of place"
That's quite the truth for a lot. But did he see that? Is that why he killed himself rather than her?
Amazing piece that kept my attention the whole time, a inch away from the screen.
Again, sensational write. 100/100
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Wow, thank you so much, beautiful! I really appreciate it. x
Wow, this is really good. I loved the twist in the middle, it sort of brought the first part into a different light. Dark and beautiful, it literally pulled me in from the very first line.
this was ridiculously good kelsey! I haven't read your work or anyones on here in some time. You seem like you're starting to really get into this writing thing. So did you have the entire story kinda planned out, or did you make it up as you went alone writing this?
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Wow, thank you! Honestly, when I started writing it, I wanted it to go from something dark to someth.. read moreWow, thank you! Honestly, when I started writing it, I wanted it to go from something dark to something beautiful, and instead, I wrote this. This definitely wasn't in the plan.
Holy goodness. This is intense. It gave me the chills. The rhyming to it added everything it needed.
"Beauty, it bleeds
from her beautiful face
Her looks, they deceive
she's quite out of place"
That's quite the truth for a lot. But did he see that? Is that why he killed himself rather than her?
Amazing piece that kept my attention the whole time, a inch away from the screen.
Again, sensational write. 100/100
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Wow, thank you so much, beautiful! I really appreciate it. x
I love the images that came to mind as I read this.. It played along like a little mini movie.. Very powerful and in depth emotions.. You know how to pen this subject very well...xo
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
My, thank you so much, lovely. It's always a pleasure reading your kind reviews, and I promise you i.. read moreMy, thank you so much, lovely. It's always a pleasure reading your kind reviews, and I promise you it's greatly appreciated. Thanks again. x
This definitely had a really nice flow and told a great story.. So sad and mysterious... He starts out planning to kill her, and ends up killing himself. They're strangers, yet there seems to be some unexplainable thing between them. I really couldn't wrap my head around this poem, it left me thinking, wondering.. This was a very beautiful piece though, I think you did an amazing job with it. I totally didn't at all expect this from you, based on your other writing. I really liked it though; it was sad, but an enjoyable read all the same. Beautiful write(:
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
I'm glad it kept you guessing and wondering, as that's just one more thing I was going for with this.. read moreI'm glad it kept you guessing and wondering, as that's just one more thing I was going for with this piece, along with something rather unexpected from me as a writer. Thank you, I really appreciate it. :)
12 Years Ago
It was no problem, I really enjoyed reading it, so thank you for that (:
Very interesting and unique, I wasn't expecting something like this from you, it was not out of your reach at all, good job!
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
I suppose that was what I was going for - something rather unexpected. Thank you, I always look forw.. read moreI suppose that was what I was going for - something rather unexpected. Thank you, I always look forward to your reviews!
Beautifully written about a tragic scenario. There is mystery in this, and yet, there is a lesson somewhere...or insight...I am not quite sure. I find that my mind is going wild with this...that is a compliment...I am trying to arrange answers and psychological insights ad nauseam...in the final analysis, I am just amazed. A haunting work, well penned and expressed. Wow, your amazingly talented.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
Your reviews have given me a much needed confidence bost. Thank you so very much. This is exactly wh.. read moreYour reviews have given me a much needed confidence bost. Thank you so very much. This is exactly what I was going for with this piece, something haunting and rather mysterious. I considered adding details to it, but then I figured that'd take away from it, so why not just leave the mystery and let the reader draw their own conclusions? Again, thank you so much for your time and thoughts.
12 Years Ago
Sometimes it is best to "Let The Mystery Be". Well done. You deserve the praise...keep going, and t.. read moreSometimes it is best to "Let The Mystery Be". Well done. You deserve the praise...keep going, and trust your poetic voice, it is true.
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