Silent Goodbye

Evening silhouettes 

   fade into the night

Silent, still darkness

    not a cloud in sight

Gun to his side

    not a care in the world

Death on his mind

    he's done this before 

An innocent cry

    a plea for help

No one can save you

    not even yourself 

He chooses the girl

    all dressed in black

A painted smile

    a love, she lacks

Beauty, it bleeds

    from her beautiful face

Her looks, they deceive

    she's quite out of place

His hands, her eyes

    to her surprise

Her lips quickly part

    he quiets her cries

Gun to her head

    the next step, a given

He looks in her eyes

    the tears have arisen

His finger, the trigger

    goodbye unknown friend

Your beauty has silenced

    you must now meet your end

His eyes meet hers

    a helpless plea

Her voice, it shakes

    "oh please, spare me"

His finger, her lips

    he whispers a prayer

He pulls the gun back

    while she quietly stares

The gun meets his head

    she quickly cries out

The trigger is pulled

    just as she is about

To throw herself forward

    would have taken the fall

Not knowing the man

    but not caring at all

His body, the floor

    she crawls to his side

A kiss on the cheek

    a silent goodbye

Reviews

[.Lost Soul.]

Holy goodness. This is intense. It gave me the chills. The rhyming to it added everything it needed.
"Beauty, it bleeds
from her beautiful face
Her looks, they deceive
she's quite out of place"
That's quite the truth for a lot. But did he see that? Is that why he killed himself rather than her?
Amazing piece that kept my attention the whole time, a inch away from the screen.
Again, sensational write. 100/100

[Kelsey]

Wow, thank you so much, beautiful! I really appreciate it. x

[John]

Damn good rhyming schemes.

[Kelsey]

Wow, thank you.

[disheveledApathy]

Wow, this is really good. I loved the twist in the middle, it sort of brought the first part into a different light. Dark and beautiful, it literally pulled me in from the very first line.

[Kelsey]

Thank you so much, I really appreciate that. xo

[dukovan]

this was ridiculously good kelsey! I haven't read your work or anyones on here in some time. You seem like you're starting to really get into this writing thing. So did you have the entire story kinda planned out, or did you make it up as you went alone writing this?

[Kelsey]

Wow, thank you! Honestly, when I started writing it, I wanted it to go from something dark to something beautiful, and instead, I wrote this. This definitely wasn't in the plan.

[Lily Mae]

I love the images that came to mind as I read this.. It played along like a little mini movie.. Very powerful and in depth emotions.. You know how to pen this subject very well...xo

[Kelsey]

My, thank you so much, lovely. It's always a pleasure reading your kind reviews, and I promise you it's greatly appreciated. Thanks again. x

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

This definitely had a really nice flow and told a great story.. So sad and mysterious... He starts out planning to kill her, and ends up killing himself. They're strangers, yet there seems to be some unexplainable thing between them. I really couldn't wrap my head around this poem, it left me thinking, wondering.. This was a very beautiful piece though, I think you did an amazing job with it. I totally didn't at all expect this from you, based on your other writing. I really liked it though; it was sad, but an enjoyable read all the same. Beautiful write(:

[Kelsey]

I'm glad it kept you guessing and wondering, as that's just one more thing I was going for with this piece, along with something rather unexpected from me as a writer. Thank you, I really appreciate it. :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

It was no problem, I really enjoyed reading it, so thank you for that (:

[Damien Davison]

Very interesting and unique, I wasn't expecting something like this from you, it was not out of your reach at all, good job!

[Kelsey]

I suppose that was what I was going for - something rather unexpected. Thank you, I always look forward to your reviews!

[Tyler Myers]

I loved it if flowed nicely, and the story line was superb. One of the better pieces I have seen

[Kelsey]

Oh goodness, thank you so much.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Beautifully written about a tragic scenario. There is mystery in this, and yet, there is a lesson somewhere...or insight...I am not quite sure. I find that my mind is going wild with this...that is a compliment...I am trying to arrange answers and psychological insights ad nauseam...in the final analysis, I am just amazed. A haunting work, well penned and expressed. Wow, your amazingly talented.

[Kelsey]

Your reviews have given me a much needed confidence bost. Thank you so very much. This is exactly what I was going for with this piece, something haunting and rather mysterious. I considered adding details to it, but then I figured that'd take away from it, so why not just leave the mystery and let the reader draw their own conclusions? Again, thank you so much for your time and thoughts.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Sometimes it is best to "Let The Mystery Be". Well done. You deserve the praise...keep going, and trust your poetic voice, it is true.

[BlondeFox]

wow! this is so amazing! its beautifully written and the story in it....breathtaking....This is so beautiful :)

[Kelsey]

Goodness, thank you so much, lovely! :)