Unwanted

Like captured grass that wilts and fades, the colors being drained.

Like leafless trees, their branches dead and broken.

Like falling snow that doesn't stick, it melts away and is forgotten.

I am the changing weather, the sadness that you find.

I am the grass that loses its life.

I am a tree that's stripped of its leaves.

I am the snow with no place to go, the weather not allowing me to stay.

Like falling rain on a sunny day, a rain that doesn't cease.

Like a stirring storm, loud crashes and bright streaks.

I am the rain that doesn't leave.

I am the storm over the sea, sailors begging me to ease.

I am everything you don't want to see,

I am the storm,

The storm is me.

Author's Note

I don't usually write poetry like this, so I'd really appreciate your thoughts and suggestions. Thank you.

Reviews

[Jordan's Back]

I often times feel like this, Abashed, Abused, alone.. I have two spectrum's to myself, The hopeless romantic, and the Psychotic freak. This poem is written very well, Its expressionism is well beyond depth, it pierces the very core of the heart. This is definitely a favorite of mine, and I look forward to reading more from you!

[Kelsey]

Thank you, dear, I really appreciate it. x

[Jordan's Back]

no problem. It was genuinely my pleasure!

[knapp darko]

I really enjoyed this, I loved the line 'I am the rain that doesn't leave.' really interesting and I look forward to reading more of your work

[Cole Hayley]

Like falling rain on a sunny day, a rain that doesn't cease.
Like a stirring storm, loud crashes and bright streaks.

I love that line. A very solid poem

[Kelsey]

Than you so much. x

[zainul]

The storm captivated me.
Want such lovely storm again and again.
100/100

[Kelsey]

Thank you so much, I really appreciate it.

[zainul]

This is my pleasure.
Thank you very much.

[Muse]

Like falling snow that doesn't stick, it melts away and is forgotten.

What lovely melancholy words you share.

[Kelsey]

Thank you, dear. x

[Crowbar]

"I am everything you don't want to see"
Great ending; it really tied the whole thing together. Like that rug from the Big Lebowski. I think this deserves a nice 100 because you stepped out of your comfort zone and nailed it.

[Kelsey]

Wow, thank you so much. Really, it means a lot. (:

[Sahil - Shore]

i really like ur comparisons ..nice one
pls dont judge me by the rating
becoz i like this poem,truly

[Kelsey]

I can't see what you rated it, but either way I appreciate it greatly. Thank you!

[Sahil - Shore]

umm....sixty percent i would say....but yes, i like it

[Moon]

Wow , this is magnificent ! You should write more poetry like this .

[Kelsey]

Thank you so much!

[Soul Fire]

wow lovely

[Kelsey]

Thank you. x

[Soul Fire]

You're welcome

[Matty Bosox]

I cannot believe you are only sixteen with how brilliant this write is....Everything is so well and beautifully descripted...The changing of the grass, the wilting of the branches, everything so descriptive and stunning...I just cannot believe that you are only sixteen, I can only imagine if you keep your writing skills growing...By the time your in your twenties your going to be another Poe, Whittman, Thomas, or maybe even greater!!! Keep up the great writing Kelsey and don't stop growing your skills...

[Kelsey]

That's quite possibly the sweetest thing anyone's ever said about my writing. Thank you so much, I'll definitely continue to do what I love, and hopefully improve on it a lot. Thanks again! xo