Keuka Healing

This poem is about a dear friend who lost his father and his lake house, on beautiful Keuka Lake, was all that he had left of him. I tried to imagine what that place and those waters did for him.

Once more, I stand and watch you,

Just as the days that pass you are ever flowing,

Ever changing,

And with each wave you carry me,

You hold my happiness, my memories, my hopes…

You know my heartache, my anger, my faults…

And still… you’re there…

With compassion you guide me,

With each storm you teach me…

 That I can stand firm and overcome,

With each beautiful, starry night you show me…

 How absolutely amazing life can be,

With each sunrise you help me realize…

That every day is full of hope and new opportunity,

And as I stand on this dock,

Watching the sun fade over these hills,

You open my eyes and my heart to see…

 That though the sun may set, this is no ending…

It’s just one more chance at a new beginning.

Reviews

[Shonte']

You have a beautiful writing style and voice. This flows really well and leaves me feeling calm, relaxed. I can picture myself out on the lake, taking in the sounds and beauty of nature. There isn't anything wrong with the poem it as is; however, if you wanted to hone in and make it a little tighter, you could omit some of the prepositions and articles that accompany the beginning of some of the lines. For example:
Once more i stand and watch you
just as the days that pass you are overflowing,
ever changing
With each wave you carry me,
hold my happiness, my memories, my hopes
You know my heartache, my anger, my faults
Still, you're there....
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Just a thought, nothing set in stone :-) By the way, I'm digging the font.

[Spirit]

Thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate it :) The poetry I've posted are ones that have been saved on my laptop. When I copied them and pasted them here the font stuck with it, which I kind of love. It brings a nice effect :)

[Willis Walker]

A very emotional and emotive piece, I can really feel the pain of loss from this piece. The use of ellipsis throughout really shows that this is no ending and the story shall carry on. A beautiful message.

[Spirit]

Thank you for your kind words!