Painted Smiles.

I had a dream last night, and this is the best way i can describe it. :D enjoy:)

Even the warmth of the sun,

Couldnt melt the ice,

That sits upon,

His frozen heart.

 

The winds can only,

Dust the problems,

Not to completely,

Blow them away.

 

Water to clense,

His spoiled body,

It too,

Is corrupted.

 

The strongest muck,

Couldnt fill the holes,

In his head,

He is dead.

 

Has no one seen him,

Or the pain that rest on his sholdures?

The devil burns his,

Dignity.

 

Open the doors,

Let him pass,

Walk him through,

Those golden gates.

 

Touch him God,

Show him the truth,

Include the dark details,

Breathe into him.

 

His scars show,

The pain he inflicted,

Unto him,

And others.

 

Deepening the soul,

With a fire rage,

He screams his name,

But his words shatter in the dark.

 

Muted children,

Running through tall grains of gold,

Smiles painted on their faces,

He is shot with the truth.

 

Not only has the sun burnt out,

This truth is gleeming in his eyes,

And as this dream ends,

I say good night.

 

Author's Note

Thanks for taking the time to read this, if you read it, i would love a review as well. I do return the favor :))

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I love this as well. It does explain struggles in real life...because someone always struggles when they don't have anyone near them that could help them. I loved this poem a lot. Thanks for sharing.

[YouoweYoupay]

I had to think for a few minutes before I realized the idea of this write. I loved the first few lines and the second last stanza. Good poem, with a spirit of pain, faith, and hope all together. Keep writing.

[Courtland Sky]

i love it.! it really does describe real life situations and struggles.!

[RJM]

beautiful, a poem about redemption and forgiveness. I love how the way the man is redeemed of his errors at the end.

[Michael X]

beautifully done, this is my avorite piece by you, only for a few certain aspects the seem prominent, like focus, sentiment and emotion, although all your work is equally consistant in its quality of sincereness. this poem itself has touching features that draw the reader to ponder heaven and dying, and what happnes to those we leave behind, its an awsome poem,
a 100 for the celestial imagery and word play.

[KayDennyy!(:]

this is like really good; gave me inspirtation to write;D love you.

[Jeff]

It's very good. The person in the poem is struggling to be in the light, and I can relate.