i miss you dad

i miss you

i miss the time we spent together

i miss seeing you

i miss hearing your voice

i miss the way i could go to you for anything

dad i miss you

i miss you

 

i miss you

i miss your smile

i miss the old times

i mis our father douter time together

i miss spending the holidays with you

i miss spending the weekends with you

i miss spendingthe summer with you

i mis you dad

Reviews

[Katannaism]

There's a lot of 'I misses' in this. I'd suggest some minimalism in there. But its a very touching piece. Very moving. Its also quite sweet and tragic. Good job. Keep it up.

[NeverSurrender]

It's a nice poem. I'd prefer if the 'i's were 'I's and there are some typo's, but the poem itself is nice.

keep it up

N.S.

[.SaveSydney!.]

A few spelling errors;
BUT,
It's very simple, yet emotional. Which is always a thing to admire in a poem. :)

[Adelia Alighieri]

It somehow reminded me of the song 'I miss you' by Miley Cyrus.
It shows your true feelings and your love. What more does anyone want? :)

[Eva]

i love your peom it makes me want to cry. it's the plain truth of missing someone dearly. good job!

[Sincerely, Sofia]

This is a very simple yet emotional. I really like it,

[Samuel Dickens]

You need your father and I'm very sorry he's not there for you. Not knowing the circumstances, I can't say much more than that, but only to wish you happiness. The fact that you're writing with your heart is a good thing.

[Paul Okeke]

lovely one

[Revolved]

I know this feeling... My empty heart always gets fulfilled in the weekends though! I love it! Wonderful write even though it has some mistakes.

[Arctic Fox]

Day dreamer got to it before I could. Much better Miss Bella. A good, heart felt piece as well.