Your Truth

It is much easier to face Truth
When you're the one who created It

It can't surprise you, or scare you
It's knowing eyes have been sculpted by your hands
It's malicious mouth has been twisted by your fingers
It is no match for it's maker.

But now It is changing form
Distorted by Reality

You are falling
You are dreaming

I am grasping for you
Trying to cling to what is real

You didn't even put out your hand.
Don't you realize I'm trying to save you?

Author's Note

doesn't it suck when people won't let you be there for them?
selfish, maybe.
but it's the least they could do.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Few people are wise enough to reach out for hope when given. I like the flow of thoughts and the strong ending.
"You didn't even put out your hand.
Don't you realize I'm trying to save you?"
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Azeremen12]

You gain a nice rhythm at times and then it just stops. This sounds like a personal piece, but try to incorporate more technique into your art to really make it touch your audience the same way the emotion touched you. I liked it.

[allie_arrowz]

thanks. when does it lose rhythm?
and yeah, its personal. and it seemed to touch people the way it is.

[Azeremen12]

You get a good flow in your second par. ("It can't surprise you or scare you..") But then the other pars. have either a high syllable or low syllable count that derails that pace. I am sure it touched people I just merely suggest that if you tighten up your technique it would touch them both with raw emotion and in poetic aesthetics.

[Emrys Realmskip]

This made me cry, My good friend is very depressed and I'm trying to help.. yet she pushes me away :/ Thanks for making a bold statement! Love it!
XxSavvySealMyFatexX

[Destinyxi]

It is much easier to face Truth
When you're the one who created It

It can't surprise you, or scare you
It's knowing eyes have been sculpted by your hands
It's malicious mouth has been twisted by your fingers
It is no match for it's maker.

I love those parts. I like how you capitalize certain letters :)

[nigrum homonculus]

ah this, this is something. because i'm going through this right now as i type this. when poetry makes me shout out "OH MY GOD THANK YOU" in the dead of night, its special. well done.

[Rene Velez]

Cool write

[Alessander]

if the person is male, it's hard for our kind to ask for help. We're drilled from the womb to never show weakness or ask for help.

Other times, the downward spiral just blacks out the world, voices, hands...

[allie_arrowz]

If they are someone you love, they are always worth it.
thanks for the reviews!

[Wild Willow Blue]

In my opinion, if the person you are trying to 'save' does not want saving, then they are not worth saving. It's harsh, but true for the entire world.

Very well expressed.

[A Black Rose]

Such wisdom at such a young age..I like the way you made Truth into a being...as if you were relating to a person...trying hard to remain true to the Truth in a distorted world. I love the end when you confronted Truth explaining how he was losing himself and he did nothing to help you save Him. ..that's what I perceived. I love it.:)

[Remember Courage]

I love this poem it's amazing. I like the part when your detailed description of forming truth. you made it seem personified as a person which makes it easier to relate to something once you know its not a feeling (which is hard to describe) or a human. Great read I expect great things for you!
-Courage