Oh, the Shame

Shameful begging,
At your feet,
I kiss, i weep.

The soldiers creep,
They chain my hands,
They drag me from you.

Shameful begging,
At your feet,
"Please, spare my heart!"

They drag me away,
Your eyes are dry.

I kiss, I weep,
Oh, spare me.

Reviews

[Mark]

I like it because it leaves much of the story open. I don't have any comment on the structure, it seems adequate. Somehow the words and the structure don't say much to me yet the whole does. The sum of the parts I suppose. The poem becomes a mild enigma for me, I don't know where it is but it is there. Thanks.

[eglantine]

Like said, it's better to have loved than to never have loved at all... even if that means heartbreak. Great imagestic, simple poem.

[JohnnyMagrinho]

We all lose. It's an inevitable part of life and I think it's about fighting the right fights. Sometime's we're fighting a losing battle, sometimes we can win.

It's just never nice when we stripped of that once happiness and left with memories of it.

This is a heartfelt poem and probably couldn't be any more raw than it is.

Whether you're dragged or feel yourself walking away, sometimes there is nothing left to salvage and you're left to pick up the pieces even if your heart feels unmendable.

I like how this piece reads, something about it lets us see what you are really feeling and it's quite a mature, direct approach on your situation.

It's not exactly crying or wailing, more lamenting such despair and longing.

[Jordan A. Wilson]

this one makes me wonder because there's so much this can allude to. nice job.