Oh, the Shame

Shameful begging,
At your feet,
I kiss, i weep.

The soldiers creep,
They chain my hands,
They drag me from you.

Shameful begging,
At your feet,
"Please, spare my heart!"

They drag me away,
Your eyes are dry.

I kiss, I weep,
Oh, spare me.

Reviews

[Mark]

I like it because it leaves much of the story open. I don't have any comment on the structure, it seems adequate. Somehow the words and the structure don't say much to me yet the whole does. The sum of the parts I suppose. The poem becomes a mild enigma for me, I don't know where it is but it is there. Thanks.

[nyla bass]

unmercifully poignant; powerful imagery. thanks for sharing it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words. The short lines you gave enough to create sad visions of begging to be spared. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Layla J Omorose]

As I am reading I am thinking what? what is it that the speaker needs to be spared from? One would assume that it was about like with your use of the line "Please, spare my heart" and the other lines and that may be true but I also feel as if it can pertain to almost anything because the heart is connected to all. But then I realized it didn't matter what it was but that it was about the pain of loss and the sense of doom that could be felt as the speaker realizes there is no savior, no freedom, no salvation just impending doom no matter how much we lower ourselves or beg and plead. Very good work.

[allie_arrowz]

heartbreak

[Freedom's Child]

Great emotion, I really like the harsh imagery it does a great of showing the emotion. "shameful begging at your feet" is a great line and I like that you used it twice. I also like "Your eyes are dry.

[MOON]

Poignant loss of love. Good write.

[James McFadyen]

Its concisely cruel. filled with mystery and despair a good read

[Kaylor Mason]

That cold blooded b*****d . . . . "sigh . . ."

[Owlgirl]

Wow! I love the emotions that flow out of this like tears into an ocean of pain and longing. Great job!

[An owl on the moon]

One feels a trembling agony in your words... the longing to stay... to love... to live as you once did... As metaphor or more, this speaks so deeply to the losses we face in our lives, and the desire to keep things the same, even in shame.