The love life

The Love Life

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Life is so hard when you don’t have the life you need. When the love of your life leaves you that’s the end of your life. It’s hard to think every day that you’ll never have that person in your life ever again. That no madder what you do or say you can’t have them back or you’ll never be with them in your life. Life is a b***h n death is her sister n love is from hell. Love is not happiness for every happiness is only in a fairy tales. Love is so much pain but then you can’t live without it.

Reviews

[Jane Doe]

I like it(: it's pretty unique I like the punctuation how Its so odd not commas but that might just be a me thing lol sorri
Anyway oh yea but it's pretty ignoring the grammar errors heartbreak sucks but you should never give up the will to go on for only in the future can you find your destiny(:

Xoxo
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100/100

[M]

I love the emotions that come across in the poem. My main suggestion would be that you cut down on the use of the word life so that it flows better and sounds less repetitive. I like sad poems, so this one really appealed to me. :D

[emman]

so true!

[Stefan224]

i agree so much with this poem very well written and it speaks so true

[Andrew Vaughn]

i can relate to this, very well done!

[Tai Ryens]

Your concept here is absolutely lovely ^^
But may I ask kindly, fix some of your grammar/spelling mistakes. I can't tell if you did that on purpose to shorten typing time, but just please, I ask you kindly to fix it. You also misspelled a word here, and missed a few commas, but I'll leave it up to you to find it; it helps your proofreading skills and results in your writing skills to get polished slightly.
Anyways, this feeling is like hell. Everyone has passed this feeling once or twice in a lifetime, possibly even more.
Great job on writing a story that relates to many of us.

[DarkShines]

Wonderfully done. And i can relate to this well. Good job!

[alley]

Oh my thank you so much love!

[Cody Michael]

Perfect..this hits so many truths in life and show so much emotions. I think it is beautifully written and crafted :)