Into the Box

where pattern & repetition sometimes go

Into the Box

He was writing himself into a box

Coffin like, dark, 6x4 with all

Mathematical consideration available

Lies, myths, blather

we're all lining themselves up in perfect little lines

He looked it over

Soon they would charge

Attack the beauty

The simplicity of a human being

A person who could look around

and smile at the world.

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

Thanks Richard! It's been awhile since you visited. Now I feel I owe you a visit.

regards,
al

[R Smith]

I really like this Al, seems we have a rhyme and free verse thing going on, for my self i remember when i started writing age 18, i had no idea of meter and rhyme, i was told a poem must rhyme but its not the way they always came out, so in the end i did what came out, if it rhymed all well and good but if it did not then......all well and good :) i'm afraid i can't conform to how it should be after all who decides such things, so called critics i guess, lets go on as we are my friend and write with the freedom to rhyme or not to rhyme, that is the question :) Great work Al :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you know i love this being a blank verse kind of guy...for years critics of my poetry told me i needed to write sonnets, to do rhyme schemes, to get serious about my craft.

i would have been buried in rhyme and meter, for sure.

and there would have been little service or fanfare---

i am glad i stayed true to me...otherwise, who knows?

i would be a form ghost---sobbing at the repetition, from inside the box.

thank you for this poem Al.

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Hi FT,

If you look into aspects of the 6 x 4 dimensions you would find some interesting concepts about it. Thanks!

Regards,
Al

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such a wonderful piece about falling victim to form and rules, perhaps... when we have to mathematically calculate and confine our words to fit a specific format (with well-executed meter and rhyme) it can be like squeezing them into a coffin...and those lines can attack as might the critics of free verse poetry... love the analogy here, Al... great piece! - FT