Double Star

Like a lone dreamer scanning the skies

for signs of intelligent life, for so long

I waited staring at the distant stars.

At last, like a never-before seen comet,

 

That emerges from the bosom of Time,

You arrived, and lit up the dark firmament

Of my mind, and graced my unbelieving eyes

With the most beauteous sight of sights.

 

In our cosmic dance, we are linked by

An unbreakable chain made of starlight;

We waltz to a private corner of Venus

Where we careen, collide, and explode

 

In a shower of glimmering sparks.

Who are you behind your dazzling veil?

A goddess, an angel, or the missing part of

My soul at last come to make me whole?

 

We bathe in the moonlight at night,

Dry ourselves in the sun at midday,

And like tight-knit double stars, 

Our constellation is here to stay.

 

 

Reviews

[Delmar Cooper]

Wild dance, up there in the Cosmic Ballroom to the celestial strains the music of the spheres. Like the whole idea, thanks for taking me along.

[Ruth]

Incredibly beautiful...the scene set so vividly and serene. I find such wonderful description in your poetry :)

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

We waltz to a private corner of Venus
Where we careen, collide, and explode

I really love this part, This is a wonderful write, such vivid imagery

[Writergurl]

We waltz to a private corner of Venus
Where we careen, collide, and explode

Love this part, this is wonderful Laz.

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved how you used the language. The words danced to perfect meaning and place Laz.
"In our cosmic dance, we are linked by
An unbreakable chain made of starlight.
We waltz to a private corner of Venus
Where we careen, collide, and explode"
the above lines were my favorite. Thank you, my friend, for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Amber Stone]

indeed Chris, metaphor and images are majestic here.
loving the mood of the speaker and the freedom of the rhymes too,
thank U L.K. for sharing it.
sincerely, Amber

[Chris Shaw]

Wonderful. Metaphor here Laz. When stars collide, the future can look bright. Dreamy, romantic with super imagery. Nice job done here.

Chris

[Laz K.]

Thank you!
Your visit and feedback are much appreciated!

[Chris Shaw]

My pleasure :)