Stone Statue

Stone Statue

A Poem by Laz K.

Shiny silver ribbon in

Your jet-black hair

The cold glimmer of

Your false light was

Enticing, tempting, mesmerizing

I reached out to touch you, but

Like a creeping vine

You coiled round my wrist

Slithered between my fingers

Climbed up my arm

And now your silver ribbon

Adorns my neck

Like a delicate chain

Caught in your web

I’m a stone statue among

Wild, thorny roses that bloom

With a loud color and

A pungent smell

© 2020 Laz K.


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I chased that silver ribbon a few times...and then the light went out and I tripped and broke my heart.

My common sense took a hit as well...Now that smell is killing me and I have to shield my eyes
from the "loud color."

Well done, Laz...you wrote so many of us into this.
j.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laz K.

3 Years Ago

Thank you j.
I am also trying to employ common sense, but I just can't get over the fact that.. read more



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I love this poem, the sound of it and the imagery.

I also love your profile statement:

"I make stories, and they make me".

I am jealous that I didn't think of that because it is exactly how it has been for me since I started writing!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laz K.

3 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and commenting.
As we write, we're being written, right? That's why it.. read more
Helen

3 Years Ago

Yes, truly magical!
This is brilliant writing, snapping imagery, fulsome metaphor, the stark silver ribbon. At first I was going to relate to your message which is strong & vivid. This could've been said about me, in my younger, more predatory days. But then your wordcrafting bowled me over & reading this became all about picturing that silver ribbon strangling this guy into submission (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


Amazing use of words and thoughts Laz.
"I’m a stone statue among
Wild, thorny roses that bloom
With a loud color and
A pungent smell"
I did like the above lines. Us, who become stone statues. Do we become just observers of our world. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


This could be a Government health warning on love and the consequences one finds themselves in when the silver ribbon tightens around ones neck. Then again, who reads Government health warnings. Like this write.

Posted 3 Years Ago


I chased that silver ribbon a few times...and then the light went out and I tripped and broke my heart.

My common sense took a hit as well...Now that smell is killing me and I have to shield my eyes
from the "loud color."

Well done, Laz...you wrote so many of us into this.
j.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laz K.

3 Years Ago

Thank you j.
I am also trying to employ common sense, but I just can't get over the fact that.. read more

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Added on December 23, 2020
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Laz K.
Laz K.

Hungary



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