Prime.

Poem - ATC

The morning after,

The Birthday.

A messy head at best not rested

Deep in bed not dressed yet

properly, it's all different.

Then comes forth the regret

On set like a storm of guilt and re-evaluation

Of Individual progression

Guilted, quilted spinal aligned in the time

you set for yourself to become right.

Wishing away the flame

Doesn't make the conscience go away

The Birthday Game.

You're different, maybe more clear

Nearer the finish line but

Still there's the fear 

You did not do

What you were supposed to,

Another year, to be better

To be new.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah yes...that new year...what did we learn, what did we achieve? what goals?

we can wish away the flame, but the birthday candles still burn, still get blown out...and another year smolders...what did we do with it?

life gets shorter each day...are we making the most of it?

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Thank you very much :)

[A.marie.speaks]

Lovely lines I can relate to. "Guilted, quilted spinal aligned in the time you set for yourself to become right." Those are my favorite pieces but then entire poem is thought provoking and nostalgic. Great work

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Thanks a lot :)

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This piece forces us to think about our own birthdays and our own primes. I love the image of 'the morning after" - such an interesting way to look at ageing.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Thanks a lot :)

[R Smith]

sounds like the pleasures of getting older and not being able to maintain that same hectic lifestyle of youth, annoying i'm sure, in fact i more than know it lol :)

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Thank you :)

[AaronFreitas]

Nice write Ally... love the thoughts. As you get older and grow so does your mind. Nice write :)

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Thank you :)

[andrew mitchell]

Another year, another goal, more dreams. nice write!

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Thanks very much :)

[Pixieblue]

Maybe your just older,
have you looked in the mirror yet are their any more wrinkes ;)
Don't waste a day!

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

My wasted days are my favorite ha got to love the laugh lines :):)