Ten years from now

Ten years from now,

Everything will have changed

Everything that happened over the past years

Will either be remembered or forgotten.

 

But will our friendship stand the test of time?

Will the love that simply blossomed throughout the years

Remain in our lives?

 

Ten years from now,

We may have separate paths.

I know that in future years

You may find other people

That will give light to your bad days

But I hope you will remember the times we shared

When no one else understood us.

 

Ten years from now,

The precious dreams we once looked in fulfilling

Will possibly be in our grasp.

Some of us will have our own families,

While others will be just recovering from heartbreaks.

 

Ten years from now,

We might have already met a lot of wrong people

And are now thankful to have found the right one.

We might have already made a lot of mistakes,

And hopefully learn from them as the years pass.

 

But right now,

Life is still going on.

They say that life is too short to be sad;

There’s only twenty-four hours in a day

So we should enjoy life while we can.

We can never tell how long we have left

And ten years from now,

We might already be gone.

 

Author's Note

please leave your reviews and tell me if this even make sense.. idk, it just doesn't seem right to me. and please tell me if the third to seventh line in the second stanza is still necessary or not. :)

Reviews

[WriterSki7]

Ah yes, ephemeral time. Alas, tis one of many things in life we cannot control . . . but enough with the kind words; you don't learn from flattery!

"There’s only thirty-six four hundred seconds in a day" This line right here might be why doesn't seem right. Either elaborate on it (go into hours, weeks, months) or just cut it out all together.

As for "When no one else understands us", the only reason it doesn't make sense is becuase of what comes before it. I suggest you reword it; overall, it doesn't affect the poem too much.

That's all the mistakes I can see at the moment. As for the rest, well done!

[blackrose24]

this is very inspirational.. i like it. keep it up! :)

[Haifa]

I only can say I enjoyed reading it, its so wonderful. your title made me interesting to read it. Well done

[harman kour]

U deserve all the appreciation dear! :) its a lovely write n i enjoyed it vry mch...

[deeps]

I think this reads very well. I like this write.
Something we all need to think about.
This is a wonderful write.

[N.E.T.]

This is quite lovely. It has a darkness, but also a very real and altruistic message of mortality. It makes perfect sense and is an all too dismissed thought in the everyday of our social being. It is a smart introduction; the way it begins as if to speak to anyone and everyone, but then becomes more personal, and touches on specific emotions-like the "someone" that you the writer is missing, or hoping will have not forgotten a significant moment or time, that you will not allow to be forgotten... A significant piece I think because of it's significant message. The appreciation of life, and those moments that capture us outside of any measure of time, because it is true, that we may not still be here-a great reminder of how grateful we all should be-it has a beautiful flow-really nice job-love it! :)

[jhed]

nothing to change..everything you wrote was perfect..the flow the words..everything..it seemed so right. I wonder.. ten years from now..I finished college will we still be friends? XD

[Dev]

I'm soo sharing this with everyone I knoww... Haha.. This reminds me of a quiz me and my friends took on FB.. So we all get the same thing.. 10 years down the line we'd all be SUPER RICH with our own "Labradoodles" ( xD ) and we'd all have a daughter called Emma :P
I love this though,.. REALLY GOOD

[St.Jimmy]

amazing poem I loved the last stanza of the poem:

But right now,
Life is still ongoing.
They say that life is too short to be sad;
There’s only thirty-six four hundred seconds in a day
So we should enjoy life while we can.
We can never tell how long we have left
And ten years from now,
We might already be gone.


sometimes in fact many of the times we waste so much of our time in thinking of our future and don't think what will happen to us next minute
one should enjoy every single moment of his life
I appreciate the thought behind it

Talking about the second stanza the lines are good in my opinion there's no need of changing them
Good write!
~Aaradhya