Ten years from now

Ten years from now,

Everything will have changed

Everything that happened over the past years

Will either be remembered or forgotten.

 

But will our friendship stand the test of time?

Will the love that simply blossomed throughout the years

Remain in our lives?

 

Ten years from now,

We may have separate paths.

I know that in future years

You may find other people

That will give light to your bad days

But I hope you will remember the times we shared

When no one else understood us.

 

Ten years from now,

The precious dreams we once looked in fulfilling

Will possibly be in our grasp.

Some of us will have our own families,

While others will be just recovering from heartbreaks.

 

Ten years from now,

We might have already met a lot of wrong people

And are now thankful to have found the right one.

We might have already made a lot of mistakes,

And hopefully learn from them as the years pass.

 

But right now,

Life is still going on.

They say that life is too short to be sad;

There’s only twenty-four hours in a day

So we should enjoy life while we can.

We can never tell how long we have left

And ten years from now,

We might already be gone.

 

Author's Note

please leave your reviews and tell me if this even make sense.. idk, it just doesn't seem right to me. and please tell me if the third to seventh line in the second stanza is still necessary or not. :)

Reviews

[WriterSki7]

Ah yes, ephemeral time. Alas, tis one of many things in life we cannot control . . . but enough with the kind words; you don't learn from flattery!

"There’s only thirty-six four hundred seconds in a day" This line right here might be why doesn't seem right. Either elaborate on it (go into hours, weeks, months) or just cut it out all together.

As for "When no one else understands us", the only reason it doesn't make sense is becuase of what comes before it. I suggest you reword it; overall, it doesn't affect the poem too much.

That's all the mistakes I can see at the moment. As for the rest, well done!

[PaperHearts]

Wow! This was fantastic! This was really thought-provoking and definitely made me reflect and wonder what has happened in the past ten years and what may happen in the next ten years of my life. Although you had a couple grammatical mistakes, your poem had a nice flow to it, and had the kind of wisdom that people only dream of acquiring! :P
~PaperHearts

[The Perfectionist]

blossom should be blossomed
I think 'no one else understands us' should be 'no one else understood us' but that's just me.
'look forward' should be 'looked forward'
'might already met' should be 'might have already met'
Also, 'wrong people' should be 'the wrong people'
I also agree with WriterSki on the 'seconds' line

Your biggest problem with this is not that it doesn't make sense, but more that - as evidenced by my suggestions above - you can't seem to decide what perspective to write this in. This poem wants to be told from a past perspective and yet you keep sneaking in the present where it doesn't belong. There are a few more general mistakes other than the specific ones I pointed out, but if anyone tells you it doesn't make sense, that's probably why.

[Huggy Bear]

The work you produce is really special and this is no exception:)

[maryjaneuy]

I think this was really great and yes, it made sense at all. I love this. keep it up!

[Silere]

Listen to waterski on this one.. both suggestions are worth looking into.. but overall I liked the poem. You write from the heart which is exactly what you should keep doing. It's your strength and you should embrace that. I love the fact that you can post something even though it doesn't seem quite right to you..asking for help. You have real courage.... and I suspect you have even more talent hidden inside you that we have yet to even see.. I can't wait!! Keep writing girl.. you do it so well. Thank you for sharing!

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

i love your work!!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is very good. I like the feel in the words of the possibility of the future. 10 years in a lifetime. The complete poem was very good. I like the ending. Life is chance. We never know what may happen in a life. A excellent poem.
Coyote

It makes sense to me...you're right, we'll think time has flown in 10 years. Beautiful. :)

[Shalini Dinesh]

this is a lovely poem and ten years from now seems a long way, but after reaching the tenth year and when we stop and look back the first reaction will be "how soon the days have gone!" .... it will have lots of lesson to teach us and at the same time it will leave us with some wonderful memories too... lovely poem.. .i really liked it