Ten years from now

Ten years from now,

Everything will have changed

Everything that happened over the past years

Will either be remembered or forgotten.

 

But will our friendship stand the test of time?

Will the love that simply blossomed throughout the years

Remain in our lives?

 

Ten years from now,

We may have separate paths.

I know that in future years

You may find other people

That will give light to your bad days

But I hope you will remember the times we shared

When no one else understood us.

 

Ten years from now,

The precious dreams we once looked in fulfilling

Will possibly be in our grasp.

Some of us will have our own families,

While others will be just recovering from heartbreaks.

 

Ten years from now,

We might have already met a lot of wrong people

And are now thankful to have found the right one.

We might have already made a lot of mistakes,

And hopefully learn from them as the years pass.

 

But right now,

Life is still going on.

They say that life is too short to be sad;

There’s only twenty-four hours in a day

So we should enjoy life while we can.

We can never tell how long we have left

And ten years from now,

We might already be gone.

 

Author's Note

please leave your reviews and tell me if this even make sense.. idk, it just doesn't seem right to me. and please tell me if the third to seventh line in the second stanza is still necessary or not. :)

Reviews

[WriterSki7]

Ah yes, ephemeral time. Alas, tis one of many things in life we cannot control . . . but enough with the kind words; you don't learn from flattery!

"There’s only thirty-six four hundred seconds in a day" This line right here might be why doesn't seem right. Either elaborate on it (go into hours, weeks, months) or just cut it out all together.

As for "When no one else understands us", the only reason it doesn't make sense is becuase of what comes before it. I suggest you reword it; overall, it doesn't affect the poem too much.

That's all the mistakes I can see at the moment. As for the rest, well done!

[J.A.N]

"And ten years from now,
We might already be gone."

Endearing, reality-check, beautiful.
It's a bit ao f scary throught when people
walk into our lives and we never know how
long they'll stick around, this really brought
some thoughts to me and you have inspired me.
Thank for sharing this and keep on writing.

-j

[ice]

The content of the poem is very good, well given, and well received by the reader.
One thing I have learned from better poets is to use as few words as possible, and still get your thoughts across.
You could eliminate several words here and not lose your messege.
Such as:
Eliminate "either" fourth line, 1st. stanza
Eliminate "else" Seventh line, 3rd. stanza.
Eliminate "just" 5th. line, fourth stanza

There are others that might be taken out, but I don't want to be too critical.
This is your poem, and I enjoyed it.
Keep writing
ice

[Jazique]

It makes sense, it gose for saying "Live life" Those two simple words. Only if it makes sense to you , but feels perfectly right to me keep it up.

[Greg Skura]

I love the whole concept! I like how you conclude that this moment is most important. Overall I enjoyed it!

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"And ten years from now,
We might already be gone."
nice mood in this poem!!!:-)
i really love it!!!

james:-)

[LynLee]

this truly gets to the point of what could possibly happen in ten years, to suspect nothing. good write :)

[Daydreamer54]

It's true we don't know what to expect in the future. :) great poem!

[elyza0926]

of course this makes sense! i love this poem... i didn' bother looking with the grammatical errors, but the content was amazing.. great job.. :)

[MusicJunkie66]

I loved it!! The flow was kinda off, but it was still great =)

[rielovella]

Nice poem alison13... After reading this, I realized some things.... Hmmm.. will be still friends after 10 years? What do you think?