Love is on its way

Love is on its way

A Poem by alison13
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this is actually a song i wrote for my next book, 'Love is on its way'. the book is still not finish, but i'm gonna post the song anyway.. :)

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Love is on its way

 

We know each other better than anyone else
You know everything about me
And i never been comfortable
Like I did with you

 

I never thought I’d feel the way I’m feeling lately,
When everything you seem to do
Just drives me crazy
Lonely, I believe that you will find me
And together we might really see that
Love is on its way

 

We may not be together
Or most like before
But that doesn't change a thing
I still love you the same
Lonely, I believe that you will find me
And together we might really see that
Love is on its way

 

And in case you haven't notice
So many years before
Then I'll take this chance to say
That I love you more than
You'll ever know
And I believe that love is on its way

 

Now you're in my head like a song on the radio
Every time you stare
Makes me wonder if you feel the same
Is it just me or will you find me too
And together we might really see that
Love is on its way

 

It's been years
And everything changed
We're not the same kids playing hide and seek
But my feelings never faded
Now i'm here lying on my bed
Staring on the high ceiling
Secretly wishing you would notice
And that love is on its way

 

Moments pass, people change
But I believe that love never fades
Time might had seperated us
But I believe that what's meant to be
Will always find its way and that
Love is on its way

 

Lonely, I believe that you will find me
And together we might really see that
Love is on its way
I'll open your eyes and make you believe
That love is on its way

© 2010 alison13


Author's Note

alison13
there are a lot of lines that was repeated, in case you didn't notice the description, this is a song.. please leave your reviews. i love reviews.. :)

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This is an awesome song

Posted 14 Years Ago


I really liked it, it made me feel as if i were searching for a lost love that my heart silled ached for.Good word choice in this piece and i liked the flow of it. Great work-keep it up!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


This song is really good and by you repeating lines you are trying to invoke a message:)

Posted 14 Years Ago


I really enjoyed this write here. So much said but well written. Enjoyable read.

Posted 14 Years Ago


this seems to be a good song! it's kinda long, but it's still awesome.. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


nice song. btw, do you have now the tune? :D

Posted 14 Years Ago


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It has a musical quality to it. Just check the first para.. I'm not really good with technicals but that seems a little off.. as for the repititions I think it goes well as a song.. I can imagine it as one.. !! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


I'm not sure, but I was hoping for a sense of escalation while reading this. I didn't exactly have one. The repetition of 'Love is on it's way' was nice, but it kind of seemed a bit overworked. You didn't exactly have a continued rhyme here, which is probably what worked against you. Repeating 'Love is on it's way' twice in the final stanza did not help you in the least. Other than that, a good, sound, and decent poem in it's own right.

Posted 14 Years Ago


A beautiful poem. Flowed like music. Poetry is music and makes the heart content and unhappy sometime. I like the flow of words and and the desire of love. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


Great song! :) Again, your emotions were powerfully expressed, and I truly believed every word that you said. I thought that your chorus was fantastic, and I liked the whole concept of 'Love is on its way'. I thought that your song had an effortless rhythmic flow, and I could definitely imagine it being sung. The only major concern I had about this poem was the length of it. Just keep in mind that a song is written slightly different from a poem, and that short and sweet is more effective in that sense. Overall though, this was a pretty good effort! :D
~PaperHearts

Posted 14 Years Ago



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my name is elaine and i'm a fourteen years old girl... i'm gonna make my description short. i only have three addictions for the moment. MUSIC, BOOKS and PHOTOGRAPHY. MUSIC had been and always will.. more..

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