Perspective

is this memory real or something else

a marker for one's time,

here.

a string that ties what could have been 

with what wasn't 

and 

how this feels

so strange, still

as we rode along our journey shared

I was certain you felt loved.

I believed there were no doubts

dear,

never felt your fear

rough roads pitched emotions higher than the sun

wrong words sliced through trusting hearts

a malcontent

I had no clue

and now, I'm thunderstruck ...

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes the endings come to fast and they are surprise endings in the wrong way...the bad surprise when something negative is being felt on the other side and we are totally unaware until it is too late....or perhaps is was too late, too early.

j.

[Alisa Js]

yes, indeed... blindsided is never a good thing.

Happy Holidays

Alisa

[SZHZIA]

A very emotional piece. In my opinion memory always is real because this reason it stings me all the time. The truth and reality are always bitter and sting us all the time. Well done. Thanks for sharing.

Best
Szhzia

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, Szhzia for your comments and time.

Yes, I agree... memories are very real and do register in your brain each time you remember...

I'll be by soon.

Alisa

[SZHZIA]

Was my pleasure to review your writings. you are welcome.

Szhzia

[Tony Jordan]

Are emotional blinkers employed as we try to keep a true course? Are they then detrimental to the cause, ironically?
A superb introspection.

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, Tony for your comments and time. One heart can be on a particular path, certain that all is well, and be completely oblivious of the perception of that second heart... sadly.

I will be by soon.

Alisa

[Tony Jordan]

Yes I see.
Hearts eh?
Who'd have one?
; )

Visit anytime Alisa - always welcome

[Alisa Js]

Thanks, Tony...

Likewise...

[. serah .]

~ beautiful piece, dear alisa... ~ i really like the way it opens "the doors of perception" (to borrow a phrase from aldous huxley)... and helps the reader understand the insecurity of both people in a yin and yang equation and highlights how it's very possible that one of them missed noticing the insecurities of the other... ~ i also like the way you've illustrated the significance of a memory and how it inspires reflection, analysis and diagnosis... albeit at a later date... connecting the past with the present... and offering a new perspective... ~ it's tough to write such a complex piece which does justice to the perspective of individuals as well as the perspective of time as a whole but you've succeeded beautifully... and i especially loved the second stanza and the "malcontent" stanza... because of exquisite images and word deployment... ~ it's so inspiring to witness your journey as a poet...

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, serah.

[. serah .]

~ my privilege... :)