Indescribable

let me slip in between your night shade

next to your tomorrows

after our yesterdays have left

and together, 

we will roll up against our next sun

before it sets,

and darkness begins

let's not waste another second

it's been seasons of longing

vessels of doom,

and I am tired of driving alone

can we imagine the flicker

the flame,

is there an ember left to discover?

or have we run out of options and highways

fading next to 

the sighing window...

Reviews

[highonwords]

a love being rekindled - after a long parting, very subtle tones and very interesting lines

steph

[Corset]

so many beautiful lines AJ, I have to agree this is my favorite part too "we will roll up against our next sun
before it sets, and darkness begins" . Let's take a long drive she said somewhere into the paradisical sunset.

[Alisa Js]

Thank ÿou for stopping by. I will be by soon.

Alisa

[emmajoy]

'.. and together, -- we will roll up against our next sun -- before it sets, - and darkness begins .. '

Beautiful, visual!

Your writing captures language so very skilfully. But 'tis more than that: you place your words very carefully as if they're fragile.. and that makes your intent emotional yet utterly sincere. My impression - right or wrong, is of someone almost at the top rung of a ladder.. foot raised to reach the top - decision made. .

[Alisa Js]

Thank you.... I will be by soon.

Alisa💫

[Philip Muls]

Do we believe this can become real or is it just a longing for something which is pure illusion. Do we want to be together or just not alone.

Love it.

[Alisa Js]

Indeed! The choices are simply, really.... it's all about the decision.

Thanks for your comments and time. I will be by soon.

Alisa ;_0

[A hare off]

Your poem is very beautiful. I picture dusk falling on the day as these words are spoken. They have a soft quiet feel to them, as if a serene pause follows.

[Alisa Js]

Thank you !

[B J Hughes]

Alisa, your first verse captured me, swallowing your words hook, line and sinker. I couldn't turn away. And the digging thru the ashes, looking for the flicker of a still lit ember to rekindle the flame, I love the metaphor (having used it myself). Your yearning is so real in your words. And your word play is sheer poetry, exquisite expression that had me giving you my heart to ride shotgun with you to anywhere but here. Beautifully done Alisa. Indeed!

[Alisa Js]

Aloha B.J,

I am flattered and touched by your kind words. Thank you!

I will be by soon,
Alisa🌟

[B J Hughes]

Aye! At your leisure my sweet Alisa. :o)

[ANTO]

Hi my friend. 'Survivalists' can carry fire from B to A, with them, in the form of a single ember. Often at precursory glance the portable flame seems to be cold and done but with the right amount of TLC can become once more give warming and life-giving output.
Wow @ 'tired of driving alone..."

Excellent writing Alisa.

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, ANTO....

So nice to read your thoughts again...I trust all is well.

Alisa🎉

[David Scott]

So many questions... Maybe just the act of giving a sigh is the acceptance of the moment's gift.
Describably wonderful! (I had to make up the word...) ha.

[Alisa Js]

Thanks, David!

🎉🎉🎉

[M.Babu]

Well done! Loved the first stanza.
~M.Babu~

[Alisa Js]

Thanks M... I will be by soon.

[Nisreen]

That one love
We know is perfect
but for some reason our own fears
make us wait

but all the chemistry is there and alive

Simply an enchanting write

[Alisa Js]

Aloha,

Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments, I will be by soon,
read moreAloha,

Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments, I will be by soon,

Alisa💫