Left of Limbo

I am here again

stuck in the middle of this never ending scene

inside my dream

with you,

always you

finding myself craving

the touch of your tenderness

and

open arms,

wanting to believe this could be

and yet, I wait

for still another day

around this limbo of nothing-ness

knowing if I move one step,

everything changes.

open doors still ajar 

streaming in from outer lives

with you by my side

time would hide among buttercups

lazy days fade as mere memories

slowly rise and we

would skip off against those diatribes

smashing as we laughed...

Reviews

[David Scott]

You are not alone in this emotion. So many of us are lost in limbo it's amazing we don't just form a support group there and make limbo land more like Disney Land. Ha.
Not to trivialize the depth of love you shared however.
Life is wonderful when we share it with a kindred soul!
Beautiful.

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, David for stopping by.

I will be by soon.

Alisa ;-)

[SuspectGray]

I do like the idea of moving just one step will change everything....though in this case I think some movement would be called for. Its that risk free comfort we feel that keeps us in limbo...or at least just this side of it. Enjoyed ( : O )

[Alisa Js]

Thank you for your time and comments. I will be by soon.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and once we reach the right of limbo...there is closure in the openness of love and contentment...

and that door, always standing a little bit ajar...just means the other came in from the cold to share the warmth of a beautiful relationship....

exquisite poem.

[Alisa Js]

Thank you Jacob for stopping by and for your comments. I will be by soon.

Alisa💫

[Angelic_Starchild]

I really enjoyed the gentleness of this poem. The last two stanzas really reached out to me.

"open doors still ajar
streaming in from outer lives"

*Bravo* That was simply beautiful!

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, AS, for your time and comments. I will be by soon!

Alisa💫

[David W Moore III]

The never ending yearning rips at emotions. Nicely phrased to affect the reader. I love writing that thumps you in the soul :)

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, David

I will be by soon,

Alisa💫

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words sweet, gentle and kind.
"with you by my side
time would hide among buttercups
lazy days fade as mere memories
slowly rise and we
would skip off against those diatribes
smashing as we laughed..."
I like the use of the word. Buttercups. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Tomás Ó C..]

Ah, unrequited love... I know the feeling!

[Alisa Js]

Aloha Tomas,

Thank you for your time and comments. I will be by soon.

Alisa ;-)

[ANTO]

Aloha Alisa :)

your writing here; describing a purgatory of yearning and deep emotion.
The encapsulation - the 'snow-globe' in which the speaker finds themselves can only become toxic if fresh air via those open doors isn't allowed in.
Change is the only constant.
The whimsy toward the end relieves some of the tension.
Tis excellent

[Alisa Js]

Aloha ANTO,

Thank you, kind sir, it is always a pleasure reading your thoughts.
read moreAloha ANTO,

Thank you, kind sir, it is always a pleasure reading your thoughts.

Sending you smiles :-)

Alisa💫

[Nusquam Esse]

First of all, I am a sucker for surrealism, often dwelling between the whimsical and a deeper truth. Somehow, it gives a power which strict realism fails to capture, as is the case here; delving within more than a moment, but also uncertain futures, as the two eddy within one vague yet cohesive impression. I particularly enjoyed the first stanza, as I feel that its cadence is the most to my liking, the way the lines shift abruptly, with added repetition--it leaves a strong impact. I also find myself wondering about the diatribes; were they between us (with 'you'), in a separate future? Only thing I noticed 'off' in this is nothingness should just be one word; but considering your usage of diatribes... perhaps the hyphen was added deliberately to give an added impression of vagueness?

[Alisa Js]

Aloha NE,

I am impressed with your comment and most perceptive thoughts.

read moreAloha NE,

I am impressed with your comment and most perceptive thoughts.

The diatribes could be from any form of opposition, whether it be, 'me', 'you', 'us', or 'them'....

I will be by soon.

Alisa

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~~ this is a beautiful piece of poetry, alisa... ~~ for me, it's about moments we must experience in order to travel through our lives... so that we may ultimately unravel... and be the individuals we are meant to be... especially emotionally... ~~ i like that you experience every nuance (good and bad and happy and sad and the bittersweet) and share that so skillfully with your readers...

[Alisa Js]

Hello serah,

Thank you for your comments, I appreciate them so. Yes, our life journey is all about the moments we share and treasure... those moments and memories that live with us throughout time and space. In my life, there are certain special ones... they will stay with me forever and a day,regardless of anything as they are always in my heart and soul....

It never changes, those who have touched my soul remain...forever.

Wishing you well.

Alisa ;-)

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~~ you're very welcome, alisa... and you're right... once we're moved by someone, it's impossible to be "unmoved" by them... irrespective of all else...