Unbridled

can we make a little space for us

right here between

you and me,

not too much that interferes,

serving as

a refuge from the stead and steady bane of discontent

prancing in my head

oh! how those distant voices creep

fragments fly with broken links

and now, can't be read as they're bound to sway

beside the spoken ridge of mumbled needs

months have slipped between our hands

we turned away without a chance

did we stop

or stand,

or simply forget to believe

impotent spies from the other side

laughter derides their foolish lies

passing through another night,

it never ends...

Reviews

[dan]

When two people "need some space" it's usually a red flag, a rude intrusion into what has become comfortable (maybe too much so) in a relationship. What seems to be a little thing grows wide as a gulf, until, "months have slipped between our hands," and one realizes they can no longer even SEE the other side of this divide. The damage will have already been done. This is a delicate situation, Alisa, and you have injected it with such humanizing words, enough emotional desire to reverse the process. A very nicely written piece. take care...dan

[Alisa Js]

Aloha Dan,

Thank you for your comments and yes, I agree, when 'space' enters a relationship.... there can definitely be problems on the horizon... especially if one takes this 'space' without explanation.... and leaves the other wondering...

Something that I have found happens more often than not.

I think one of the critical keys in any relationship is a commitment to honest, sincere communication between the parties without judgement. Of being able to agree to disagree about anything without one or the other party passing or projecting their judgement of the topic onto the other without the ability to discuss. Many times, rather than confronting the issue and speaking up, one party simply walks away, turns away, or begins to go in another direction...

This is where many relationships falter....and I do speak from personal experience, sadly...

Thanks again!

Alisa ;-)

[dan]

Total honesty is something desired in a relationship but we are all too human. Looking to avoid conflict is a natural occurrence in life, and when that feeling comes in a relationship honesty can be derailed. Once a lie is told one usually tells OTHER lies to support the first one, and on and on...I believe it next to impossible for ANY relationship to have 100% honesty. I know that sounds like I'm a consummate pessimist, but I believe I'm more a realist. And I hope your "personal experiences prove me wrong! take care...dan

[Alisa Js]

Hello again, Dan...

I think my personal experience is proving you right, actually.read moreHello again, Dan...

I think my personal experience is proving you right, actually.

The other person was less than honest... and rather than confront him, I chose to walk away... in my opinion, if a person lies about something, whose to say they won't continue lying when confronted???

Of course, there are egos and other psyschological aspects to take into consideration when speaking of any type of relationships, but in the case of a romantic relationship.... I think it is important for both parties to be honest... as honesty is one of the foundational building blocks for any relationship and creates an atmosphere of trust and safety... without which, there is no relationship, but rather a mere acquaintence...

Make sense???

[dan]

Read more of what.......? dan

[Alisa Js]

I don't know what happened to my comments... hmmm.. I'll try to fix it

[Alisa Js]

Hi Dan,

Try reading my comments now.

Thanks again for your time.

Alisa😃

[dan]

Alisa, The only thing I see is you saying, "Hi Dan, Try reading my comments now. Thanks again for your time. Alisa (smiliey face) Don't know what's wrong? take care...dan

[Alisa Js]

Click on my comment after your first one...when you do..the rest of the comment expands...
read moreClick on my comment after your first one...when you do..the rest of the comment expands...

Thanks,

Alisa😃

[dan]

again, all I see are Alisa (smiley face) Why don't you just message me? take care...dan

[Alisa Js]

can we make a little space for us
right here between
you and me,
not too much that interferes
a refuge from the stead and steady bane of discontent
prancing in my head

oh! how those distant voices creep
fragments fly with broken links
and now, can't be read as they're bound to sway
beside the spoken ridge of mumbled needs

months have slipped between our hands
we turned away without a chance
did we stop
or stand
or simply forgot to believe

impotent spies from the other side
laughter derides their foolish lies
passing through another night
it never ends...

[Alisa Js]

Now, do you see it?????

;-)

[Alisa Js]

Hello again, Dan...

I think my personal experience is proving you right, actually.read moreHello again, Dan...

I think my personal experience is proving you right, actually.

The other person was less than honest... and rather than confront him, I chose to walk away... in my opinion, if a person lies about something, whose to say they won't continue lying when confronted???

Of course, there are egos and other psyschological aspects to take into consideration when speaking of any type of relationships, but in the case of a romantic relationship.... I think it is important for both parties to be honest... as honesty is one of the foundational building blocks for any relationship and creates an atmosphere of trust and safety... without which, there is no relationship, but rather a mere acquaintence...

Make sense???

[dan]

Alisa, I agree that honesty is one of the keys to a mutually loving relationship. Arguments are usually started when one or the other is NOT honest. Can it be forgiven? That depends on a lot of variables: how strong this love was before the lie; the amount of 'damage' the lie caused; how honest the one that was lied to is, and more. I have to say though that sometimes little white lies can prevent one of the two from details that they may upset them, I don't even know how to explain this. Some white lies actually keep the relationship strong and happy. I'm talking about really minor things. This isn't what you expected to hear from me, is it? I'm sorry to disappoint you, but me and my wife's marriage is over 20 years strong and some omissions of details has kept it strong with no harm done. take care...dan

[Alisa Js]

Hello Dan,

Thank you for your response. The main thing is that it works for you.... that's what's important. And coming from the perspective of 20 years experience... you're definitely on to something right.

Bravo!

Alisa

[Warren Daniel II]

I was simply taken by these lines " oh! how those distant voices creep
fragments fly with broken links
and now, can't be read as they're bound to sway
beside the spoken ridge of mumbled needs" such beauty I really enjoyed this poem.

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, Warren

[ANTO]

'did we stop
or stand,
or simply forget to believe' - these are some of the saddest words I;ve read on here. They say so much about the way things deteriorate in relationships prior to the dousing, no not dousing that would mean being proactive in putting it out, prior to the natural demise of the flame.

"impotent spies from the other side..." - the war-like talk - cold war or hot it doesnt matter. Both sides retreat to safe places/friends/times in their head and the Berlin wall is rebuilt in hearts and minds.

Truly sad piece of writing Alisa.

[Alisa Js]

Hello ANTO,

Thank you for your time and comments...yes it is extraordinarily sad when two hearts stop trying....maybe because they simply forgot to care, anymore😓

[.]

~~ wow... beautifully written... ~~ sometimes it's just too tough to stay in touch with the rhythm of romance... ~~ maybe real life gets in the way of dreams... ~~ maybe we become too critical or too cynical... until we realize how precious some moments are... and for them... it's okay to ignore other moments that are not... how shall i say it... conducive... hmmm... maybe that's the word...

[Alisa Js]

Or....maybe we just stop believing😓

[.]

~~ yeah... that's at the heart of cynicism...

[Alisa Js]

That being said, I will never stop believing in the power of love,😘 real love from the heart and soul...

...as the power of such a love can and will absolutely change your life...and once you've tasted it, flimsy imitations will never substitute again...
😍

[.]

~~ me neither...

[Jamestown]

So well written, flow and message crystal clear, when space is needed
it's needed, unfortunately many don't know how to do that without
conflict:( I enjoyed reading this, Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Alisa Js]

Thank you for your comment and time.

Aloha,

Alisa💫

[Perdition]

You're rhyming again?? Cool!!
Well I do absolutely love the way you have interwove the hand and brush of heart and time through literal question and image…As if here we could willfully stay the monster pace of each rolling month with some refuge continuous…(love be the lady?) passing slow another nigh. "O what a night it was..it really was". I say, "WHY NOT!!
Thanks A.

[Alisa Js]

Hello P,

Indeed....indeed -o-matic, my friend!

So fabulous to see you here and read your thoughts again! I have missed them.

If we could find that magical place and disappear for that briefest of moments each time the unfiltered chatter attacks, before it has a chance to land on its intended target...by simply side stepping into another dimension ...now, that would be incredibly amazing...not to mention aleivate tons of unnecessary stress.

Thank you again for stopping by!

Sending much aloha,

Alisa💫

[Perdition]

Wish I could do that!

[Alisa Js]

Me too.:-)