Bruised Bones

Heartbreak Records #5//Certain beautiful things come in flashes of purple and blue.

Everything about him was a blow of gravity

pressing onto my my skin in bursts of 

violets and blues; blooms 

rupturing on my heart;

flourishing down to my lungs -

until there wasn't enough space 

for me to breathe and

I suffocated.

Author's Note

About a feeling...

Awfully sorry for the lack of replies, responses and reviews. I'm currently sneezing my brains out and staring blankly at the screen trying to get assignments out of the way. Will hopefully find some time to read your wonderful pieces and get inspired by your creativity soon! Soon can never come soon enough.

Reviews

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

"A blow of gravity," inspired line! Scientist have so many theories about how gravity works, but no one knows for sure, for it's nothing. I also like how you describe its effect down to your "lungs," because it makes sense that gravity has teleportation powers (like by the fact that gravity exist even in doors, like in an air tight vault). The way you spoke scientifically while speaking of a guy is truly amazing art, Alice! The title was so fitting. I enjoyed your poem even outside of science, it was very touching.

Ps. I hope you feel better and do all that your trying hard to accomplish. Hugs!

[Jamey]

This is stunning and powert

[V]

Ah I love it. If feels so close to my writings, all the images and word choices. Abs great although the closing is quite negative but relatable in a way. Superb beginning, though. Your words are imprinted on my mind.

[Asante]

Another wonderful write, Alice.

In a short, sweet manner -- love hurts. You capture the essence of that phrase with images that evoke a feeling; with words that matter. As always, to me, your pieces come across as snapshots of moments that you live out in life, wherein I'm a third party playing witness to what may unfold. It's a perspective that I don't often get, but one that I genuinely love.

Always a pleasure reading what you put forth, Alice. It encourages my own writings, as you know. :)
Get well soon! x

[ReedWrite]

I'm not sure what the intent was in writing this...but I felt it as one writing from the perspective of an abused woman. Everything about him was a blow of gravity...pressing onto my skin in bursts of violet and blues (the physical bruises)...rupturing on my heart (the emotional bruises). I could be wrong...but that's where my mind went with it. Such a poignant, emotional, moving piece. Thank you for sharing this.

[WittyWonka]

Falling to one's knees is hard on a good day. It is even harder when it's a result of heartache. Well written

[Alice Poésy]

Indeed! Very well worded. Thank you so much for dropping by. Always wonderful to hear your thoughts :)

[A hare off]

Suffocated is a word used often when a romance is blooming faster than one would like. Flowers are beautiful but can be overwhelming if the garden one has to tend to is out of control. At times the other doesn't even realize what they are doing until it is too late and the relationship is exhausted. The opening line of this was extremely creative and set a path for the rest of the piece to follow.

[Alice Poésy]

Such a wonderful analysis, Anthony, and all quite spot on. I frequently tend to feel overwhelmed by beautiful things. It makes my head spin like a carousel gone rogue.

Glad you found the opening line creative. The piece was actually inspired by a blooming bruise I have resting on my left knee right now, hence the "blow of gravity" bit.

Many thanks for stopping by and a wonderful review!

[Kelly Scheppers]

...very intriguing piece, with "bursts of violets and blue", and "blooms rupturing on my heart".

Be certain to take care of yourself! ...and bless you!

[Alice Poésy]

Many thanks, Kelly, and will do! Hope you're having a good week :)