15/10/16

Fleeting Thoughts #4

I can still taste your breath on my tongue;

my heart lost somewhere in your lungs.

Author's Note

🌻
I'm currently a thousand earths away.

Reviews

[FIN]

Captured by love, Ms Poésy? Is it not a wondrous feeling! "A thousand earths away!"

The mixture of breath on the first line and continuation of lungs onto the second make this peice feel more coherent.

Beautiful poetry, as seems to be the case.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thought provoking and amazing, powerful indeed!
"I'm currently a thousand earth's away," love that line too.

[Asante]

Such a strong image in this one; one that lasts after the reading itself, nice and vividly. You know how I feel about your writings, Alice. This one doesn't fall short of the bar whatsoever, even being two lines long. :)

[1VJ]

Sensually potent, a thousand earths away perhaps, yet, surrendering enraptured passages.

[aLittlePain]

What a beautiful soul seeping image. The second line is breath taking!
Mauri is a Māori term used to describe energy/life force shared between two. This is that for me :) so perfectly measured and expressed in just two lines. R xo

[Valentine]

This one made me smile in remembrance. Nice write. Valentine

[Alice Poésy]

I'm very glad it did, Valentine! Happy you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so sensual...i love the last line...what an image to absorb.

you breathe me in....

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you so much, Jacob, I'm so flattered! This was very much inspired by those people who absorb every atom of your being without even trying.