Everything

Heartbreak Records #4//nothing.

We were collections of anatomy

walking on layers of ghosts;

Less than something,

but my love when our 

eyes meet, I know

we were more than nothing.

And 

are more than

Author's Note

That last sentence isn't a mistake. Take it as you will, it's yours.

Reviews

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

This poem takes on new meaning when you read it's title again. You have a beautiful poetic way of putting how you feel.

As humans we have an obsession with looking, no, staring, at things that never change, like the moon, the stars or a photograph, the eyes are diffidently one of these type of things. Logically thinking, a glance is all that you should need, but as they say, "A picture speaks a thousand words," so I guess we stare to see, Everything. Great title!

Sorry for the late comment. I don't know how I missed it.

[Alice Poésy]

Oh Cyprian, you always flatter me so much!

We do have that obsession, don't we? I think it's part of the desire to never let beautiful things slip from our minds.

You put it so wonderfully, I couldn't have said it any better! Thank you for stopping by. Always always a pleasure :) x

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You deserve it. :)

That makes sense too. For I fear that myself.

My pleasure, Alice :) x

[Franco]

"We are more than nothing." I like this line. I could be wrong but I feel it can have a sort of double meaning under. I like short quick poems like these that make the reader think. Quite the enjoyable read.

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Just nice and sublime. Poetic words together make marriage with beauty .

[V]

Very well written piece again, there's this haziness about it like reading through a fog, def a ghosty feel you created with your words. I think the structure of your last line is pretty smart, it immediately led me back to the title.

[aLittlePain]

Some people can do that for us...the empty shell fills with things you didn't know you wanted or needed. The remnants of 'before' can then melt away. Gorgeous expressive piece. Mauri ora...feel better. Ray xo

[Alice Poésy]

So much truth and wisdom in your comment, Ray. Thank you very much for stopping by. I hope to read even more of your work when I get the time, as I do adore your intricate and mystical approach towards life and the things surrounding us.

Feeling much better, thank you! Hope life is treating you well, too :) xx

[aLittlePain]

You are too kind Alice, take your time...I find the scenic route is best perusing at leisure ;) don't ever feel obligated my friend. I'm also pleased you are feeling better. R xo

[Asante]

This was wonderfully worded, wonderfully written!

Does this one end with the title, as opposed to beginning with it? I'm interested as hell, hoping that I come at least close to what you thought when putting it together, Alice. :)

[Alice Poésy]

Ah, Sante! Your reviews always leave me smiling from ear to ear!

If I have to be completely honest with you, this piece started nagging at my brain when a friend asked me: "What is more than nothing, but less than something?" I had a completely different answer at the tip of my tongue - which resulted in this. The answer to the "riddle" is 'anything'.

The answer to your question is a sigh, which might sound completely weird, but sometimes I tend to speak out my stuff as I write them, and I couldn't find an appropriate word for a sigh, because it drifts off into infinity, becoming a part of everything, or disappears into oblivion, into nothingness. So I dare say you were very close, Sante. Everything and nothing are both suitable words. I have quite an obsession with antonyms.

Maybe I should start posting spoken versions of my stuff too. I swear they would be about 50% better :). Thank you very much for your thoughts! Always a pleasure.

[Asante]

That was a wonderful explanation! I get it now.

That's a pretty stroke-of-genius kind of response to the question "What is more than nothing, but less than something?" I don't know too many who may have responded with "Anything."

As for spoken versions, I'd personally take that on in full; I'm sure they'd be something sweet! My pleasure, Alice. :)

[Lorry]

Superbly written. So brief, so fleeting, is the amount of time it takes someone to make us feel more than the sum of our parts, where before we were mere shadows of the intensity that someone can make us feel. Love it :)

[Alice Poésy]

Oh Nemo, you put it so beautifully! Thank you for blessing me with your words. Always a pleasure to hear what you have to say :)

[Lorry]

You are most welcome :)

[WittyWonka]

Love the opening images and that last line really does leave endless possibilities.

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you so much. Funnily enough, the first two lines came to me while thinking about a demolished room.

[WittyWonka]

That is awesome! You are welcome!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

when the hearts become full of love, we are no longer just bones, and the ghosts of our past relationships become that nothing, and yet together with our new love, we become everything.

j.

[Alice Poésy]

You always leave such beautiful words on my stuff, Jacob. Words that always leave me in awe. Always a pleasure to have you stop by and inspire me.