Blue Sins

Heartbreak Records #2

And the world keeps preaching

that love is the cure -

but he's got enough love for two men

and he still pops those pills

like hard mints.

The smoke from my cigarette

coils up in his eyes like

filmed ghosts stuck to his lenses,

his head resting in my lap;

the silver light between curtains

lying in lace patterns across his face.

And I trace his features in the dim-lit room

trying to imprint his face 

in my mind's heart as I whisper, 

Love, tell me what's on your mind,

my fingers falling into the waves of his hair 

as he rambles on about the fable 

of a red man with horns and I smile,

until he says:

Not even God forgave his favourite angel.

And my heart sinks to the bottom of the Atlantic.

The flames in the room burning so hot

that it turned everything blue.

Author's Note

Last night/morning's 4AM write. Not too sure if the image is worthy enough to be shared, but here we are.

Reviews

[Lorry]

Your first line captures what so many hear, and strive to be part of, yet we are all let down by the reality not matching those picture perfect images and quotes of love. The not even God line turns feeling on their head, as the reader wonders if it was the end of the line, or just the end of the poem. It is all the better for the unspoken, leaving the reader wondering and wandering through your lines. Superb.

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you so much for such an in-depth analysis. It's always so wonderful to hear people's thoughts. My favourite part about poetry is the "take what you want", "it is what you see" aspects to it. It can be so many things.

Thank you so much for taking the time and stopping by :)

[Lorry]

you're welcome.

[FIN]

The imagery from start to finish was fantastic. Painted a vivid picture into my mind and made me feel the scene as if I was there.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and honest words dear Poet.
"Not even God forgave his favourite angel.
And my heart sinks to the bottom of the Atlantic."
The above line stood out and held meaning. Thank you Alice for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Neal S]

This writing reminds me of a photograph. A moment frozen in time. Its just brilliant!

[aLittlePain]

Hello Alice,

Reading and learning you has a deep sense of a scene...a snapshot of you. The distinct characteristics of your work has a gentle allure and that is honest and quite delicious indeed.
Seven ways to Sunday this is exceptional! The imagery and phrasing are carefully measured by your sublime word choices. I love that yet again you're leading me (but not) to learn these two. He feels ethereal...hmm I'm not so sure that's right, he's certainly an enigma. I'm sorry I seemed to ramble ;) here's the short version... This is dope and I dig it! R xo

[Philip Muls]

If even God could not forgive his favorite angel, what is there to hope for for us who are no angels.

I like the imagery your poem evokes.

[V]

Late night writes are often the best as your writing proves, awesome lines, I love how you create those movie-like scenes and still spread so much poetry upon those images, vivid and aesthetic. Great write.

[forgotten_ghosts]

You created quite an atmosphere with this poem. Your style of writing feels so fluently to me. It kind of reminds me of my own writing skill in my mother language, but your's is better. :)

[Alice Poésy]

Aah, such kind words, you're making me blush! From what I've read, your pieces are hardly anything to call 'less good'! :) I looking forward to finding more time to read more of your work, Thomas!

Thank you very much for stopping by :).

[Jamestown]

Well written and delivered!
I could definitely feel the raw emotions and
the imagery is crystal clear.
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you so much for such wonderful words, and thank YOU for reading :). Very happy to have you drop by.

[rachel ann]

i found this poem incredibly moving. The imagery made me feel the heavy weight around the end. this is beautiful. i can feel the closeness between the relationship, but also the mystery that must be sensed around him.

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you so much for a beautiful review.

His mind and heart are from a different planet, I'm almost positive. He's quite the challenging place to be stuck in. Thank you for stopping by :)