Late Night Chronicles

Heartbreak Records #1

The rum stuck my fingers against 

the pane of your living room;

curtains open, your image floating 

on the surface of my eyes

as you sat on the sofa surrounded by sheets -

until your browns met mine 

and you couldn't bear not to say hi.

So I stood in front of your doorstep 

and we stayed like that a while;

hazel to brown,

kohl collecting in bruises beneath my eyes,

tears in my tights - until you took my hand in yours 

and kissed the raw skin on my knuckles.

The clouds drift a sliver, 

the moon casts an eye, 

always in our favour

until I untangled my hand from yours

and my voice fumbled.

I just couldn't bear

driving by your house another time

and not stopping by.

I'm sorry I

shouldn't have.

I should know better.

But I just wanted to look 

at the constellation in your eyes.

And then I left like summer does,

the leaves hushing in the breeze,

and amongst the whisperings I heard your voice saying

those three words 

we didn't dare speak.

Author's Note

An organic account of last night. Longest one yet, I think. On here, that is.

I've been away for a while, but I promise I will return all the replies and reviews later when life and my 'to do' lists calm down a bit. I just felt a need to share.

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

"But I just wanted to look
at the constellation in your eyes."

That line brought back the proverbial lump in the throat one gets whenever a situation like this arrives...the hesitation that consumes the moment is monumental. You made me feel like it was me, and it was, once upon a time.

There is so much weight to those three little words, so much commitment. But we really need to say them...for they really need to be heard. Life is too short to miss such an opportunity that may never come again.

[Alice Poésy]

Wise words, Kelly. Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. You understand.

Thank you for stopping by!

[Karmee]

Wow! this is really good,
I sense a longing in your write, very good

[Alice Poésy]

A deep longing indeed. Thank you for your kind words :)

[aLittlePain]

Exhale...there is a dull ache but it's more of a caress. I love how deeply vivid you are it's bright but not screaming for ones attention...there a gentleness in this voice...it's reflective in each line. They are each intoxicating and rich in imagery breathing life with your word choice. A stunningly intimate read. Thank you for dropping by my work, I might not have come across this otherwise. R x

[Alice Poésy]

Wow, that's such a wonderful review and kind words! Thank YOU for dropping by. Your writings are just as stunning and I can't wait to delve more into them soon :) x

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Sometimes beautiful just doesn't quite say it, this was also interesting, passionate and yet entertaining.

For an example, your scenes (saying imagery just wouldn't cut it) were so powerful. I could see everything so clearly. But I love how the characters were speechless, enabling their actions to speak so loud to the reader. And the details about their eyes, posture, and surroundings, like surrounded by sheets on the sofa or in the doorway, made me feel like I was in a Kodiak moment.

The end was strong to read, so powerful, "those three words we didn't dare speak."

Wow Alice, I loved this! :)
This is another great write from you.

[Alice Poésy]

I feel so flattered, Cyprian. You have no idea how happy it makes me to have you call them "scenes" and see you paid attention to the detail :). I love my writing as if I used a paintbrush instead of a pen, and my main focus is emotions. And like they say: sometimes silence can say more than words can!

Hehe, the ending links to another short poem I have on here: "scribbled on hotel stationery dated 20/11/2015" . I love having links between my writings. I view it as one whole conceptual project.

Thank you once again for reading, Cyprian. Always a delight to read your flattering reviews :)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You accomplish your objectives well. That's cool, how you link poems. I like how you base your poems on your life. Oh okay, I just read that other poem of yours, I see the link, that's pretty cool.

It's my pleasure to read your poems. :)

[V]

Sigh.....heartbreaking but in a nicely feeling way. I love those candid, straightforward but truly descriptions of the insights of your mind and heart, you conjure up clear, vivid, picturesque scenes like in a movie. Love that, love this one.

[Alice Poésy]

I am so flattered by your words, Vanessa. I make it a mission to include the reader in the scene and to bring them nothing but honesty. Thank you so much for stopping by. It means so much coming from you.

[V]

You're most welcome. I enjoy reading your poems.

[Asante]

Wow, this is amazingly raw! Wonderful!

As is always the case with your writings, I tend to feel as if I'm the second or third-person present, onlooking as you live out these events. They're honestly that vivid to me, and I'd imagine many other readers.

I really sat down and had to read this one over, a compliment to you. Great work, Alice. :)

[Alice Poésy]

Your reviews make me so happy! I can't thank you enough, Sante. Happy to have you along the journey as I stumble through the world :)

[Asante]

I'm always up for reading your work, and I'm most definitely along for the journey. :)
With those things said, you're welcome, Alice!