26/08/2016

26/08/2016

A Poem by Alice Poésy
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Fleeting Thoughts #3

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Gasoline-filled lungs
and brain, heart full of clashes,
his lips were aflame
and set my skin out in flashes.

© 2016 Alice Poésy


Author's Note

Alice Poésy
Reminiscing about a burning sunflower.

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Very good and interesting, entertaining images again. Though one tiny note: I think that the last line sort of pales in comparison to the other ones before, like the choice of words in your lines before the last one are more powerful...but this is not a complaint just something I noticed.. Other than that, lovely short poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Sharp eye! Indeed, the image isn't as vibrant as the ones before it. It kind of gives it a "fizzling.. read more
V

8 Years Ago

You're welcome. It does make sense, thx for the explanation.



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and yet the sunflower much like a lover...the igniting, the burning, the afterglow, the ashes...the moving on.

j.

you are a compelling writer, my friend.



Posted 8 Years Ago


Well you certainly had something on your mind.
Less is they say often more and this is yet another little belter....N

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

I always do, Neville! Sometimes I feel like I can articulate my thoughts better with such shortness... read more
Neville

8 Years Ago

No worries.........
really enjoyed this piece, well written

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
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V
Very good and interesting, entertaining images again. Though one tiny note: I think that the last line sort of pales in comparison to the other ones before, like the choice of words in your lines before the last one are more powerful...but this is not a complaint just something I noticed.. Other than that, lovely short poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Sharp eye! Indeed, the image isn't as vibrant as the ones before it. It kind of gives it a "fizzling.. read more
V

8 Years Ago

You're welcome. It does make sense, thx for the explanation.
I like it. Very concise but full of passion and visceral.

I like the idea of lips/kisss igniting the organs.

one possible change

Instead of Gasoline filled, Gasoline-drenched?

Just a thought. Could see either working.

Nice work! Intense

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you for such a constructive review.

You know, I actually was debating whether t.. read more
I may not be able to say anything that wasn't said below, for all the right reasons.
Traits that come to mind: clarity, spaciousness, vivid direction, beautiful, short-but-sweet in essence.
I really enjoyed this enough to re-read a handful of times, letting the imagery pull me away repeatedly. Fine work you've shared with us, Alice. Great work. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for a wonderful and such kind words. Sometimes I do find that shortness leaves so .. read more
Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

*for a wonderful review
Like the idea of the burning sunflower in a field of dreams.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

That is a stunning way of putting it :). Thank you for stopping by!
Wow....
This is wonderful.
Many things explained in these few lines.
brilliant writing

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Usman! You are always so kind and encouraging towards my writing, I cannot thank you enou.. read more
Usman Muhammad

8 Years Ago

It is always a pleasure reading your writings..Just keep writing like this
Wow! This is, powerful, beautiful, romantic (to me) and just amazingly penned! Inspired. Just amazing! Tyfs!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Your comment just made me smile. Thank YOU for reading. You always leave such lovely feedback on my .. read more
Cyprian Van Dyke

8 Years Ago

You're most welcome. I'm happy to hear it makes you happy. :)
not a bad imagery. grt work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thanks for reading :)!

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Added on August 26, 2016
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Tags: poetry, thoughts, experimental, confusion, love, burn

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