scribbled on hotel stationery dated 20/11/2015

scribbled on hotel stationery dated 20/11/2015

A Poem by Alice Poésy
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Fleeting Thoughts #2

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You counted the freckles on my back,
while I made a list of things 
that reminded me of you;
our throats choking on those 
three words we would not dare speak -

And for now,
that would do.

© 2016 Alice Poésy


Author's Note

Alice Poésy
Something I wrote down some time ago, found while trying to search for some inspiration to finish this creative project I have to get done by the end of this week.

It's short, but thought I'd share. I still could identify.

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This is a wonderful poem. Short and sweet. The imagery is so clear it's like I'm there as a fly on the wall for one moment suspended in eternity. The structure of this poem flowed perfectly - the punctuation worked well and the line break that implied exactly which three little words you were both choking on was stellar. Then the almost broken pause between "and for now" and "that would do" (at least for me) allowed for plenty of thought. Overall, this is really great stuff.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Your review was an absolute delight to read, filled both with praise and an in-depth analysis of the.. read more



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Such love. Silence and what's In front of you is all you needed in the moment to fulfill your hearts. Beautifully written. Made me very happy!

Posted 7 Years Ago


beautiful. So beautiful. Your writing is one of a kind.

Posted 8 Years Ago


So much said in this powerful and petite piece. It's amazing how much of life we as humans choose not to live and take tomorrow for granted, especially in love. I can relate to this piece. Saying those three words is something we all want to do, yet almost feel instant regret if you're the "first one" to do so.

But, in the midst of life's turmoil, not saying those three words will definitely "do." It complicates things.

I also found and liked a sort of double entendre, as you also ended the poem in three words: "that would do."

Love it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


time for some DayQuil....

once that throat gets cleared and the count is done, we might be able to say the words.

there is such a mood to your writing...

and i love freckles...
j.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a wonderful poem. Short and sweet. The imagery is so clear it's like I'm there as a fly on the wall for one moment suspended in eternity. The structure of this poem flowed perfectly - the punctuation worked well and the line break that implied exactly which three little words you were both choking on was stellar. Then the almost broken pause between "and for now" and "that would do" (at least for me) allowed for plenty of thought. Overall, this is really great stuff.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Your review was an absolute delight to read, filled both with praise and an in-depth analysis of the.. read more
Sometimes "I love you" is impossible to say....because of the heavy commitment that comes along with it. Love the scene you paint here. Lydi**

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Indeed it is! Thank you very much for stopping by and your wise words :)
What a smashing little write this is, am gonna read it again and again for sure...N

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Why, thank you so much for your lovely words! I'm glad you enjoyed it :). Thank you for stopping by.
Neville

8 Years Ago

My pleasure entirely.
This is a nicely well written piece

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

:) Thank you for stopping by!
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It's short but expressive. Well-written, containing deep emotions and lovely images. I like this one a lot.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you once again, Vanessa. Always so flattered by your comments!
V

8 Years Ago

:) Anytime. I truly enjoy your poems.
Sometimes the want to hear them is better than the hearing them. A beautiful moment that doesn't need to be spoken to be felt.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

No one could have said it better!
Lorry

8 Years Ago

........:)
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