Young Sunflower

Heart Anatomy Poetry #1 //when adulthood meets childhood

I still remember you young,

filling tap water into your glass,

watering the orchids in the living room.

That day your gran taught you,

about over-watering your plants,

and under-watering too;

While Elvis's LP played on the record player,

his voice singing about the bellhop's tears,

and the desk clerk dressed in black.

Last night I saw you in a shop window,

looking as if you spilt too much colour

and you had over-watered your plants anew.

In the corner of lonely street,

the building stood and blinked,

down in Heartbreak Hotel we meet.

Author's Note

I had a strange evening last night, and came home to find a sunflower on my doorstep.

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

Priceless!!!

First of all your presentation was superb... This somehow reaches deep down into the core of heart... It feels like someone is pondering upon her past memories of love and the highs and lows she witnessed with it... And by saying "when adulthood meets childhood" this truly enlightened the whole concept... Such an inspiring work...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Alice Poésy]

Aah, you're figuring me out well! Sometimes you just look into a mirror and see the child you once were speculating what's become of her. This might not make much sense, but for me, the bridge in this poem that links childhood and adulthood is the concept of watering the plants. When I was a child it was just that - looking at it now, plants can be people and sometimes you "over-water" them that you leave yourself a bit worn out.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read my work. Your review was an absolute delight!

[forgotten_ghosts]

Wow! This ambivalence or should I say balance between nostalgia and romance. Wow! I never saw such a beautiful image created by words in my head! Thank you very much for writing something like this! Sorry, that I can't give you a real constructive review, I can just say that this is perfect!

[Neville]

What a delightful write this is, to be sure, you made me feel deeply nostalgic right down to the core... Oh' & by the way, yes, there is certainly something about sunflowers.....All Good Things, N

[Alice Poésy]

Glad it took you down a delightful little lane, Neville :). Indeed! Sunflowers are like the sound of nature's laughter.

Hope you're having a good weekend, and thanks for dropping by once again! Always wonderful to have you.

[The Twin Arenas]

nice lines, nice pace. can't beat the image of a blinking building.

[Alice Poésy]

Some people think it's odd, but I see it so clearly in my mind and that's the only word I could use to describe it :). Thank you for your kind words! I'll be stopping by your work very soon!

[The Twin Arenas]

I think you'll dig it. We're working the same streets.

[R.L.Russ]

To remember what was, to look back and reflect. This is a very relatable piece, I liked the way you captured that very feeling in this piece. I found it romantic and sad at the same time. " Oh, what we wouldn't give for another yesterday > only if we knew what we did today "
Truly a thoughtful read, thanks for sharing. I hope to read more from you soon.

Sincerely, Rl Russ

[Alice Poésy]

"Romantic and sad", the feel I was going for :). Aah, yes, the things we would redo, if only we knew...

Thank you for stopping by :). And I hope to read more of your writings when I'll have the time :D.

[Jamestown]

Very well written.
Simply sweet sentiment with wonderful mood setting wording,
I'm sure you were smiling big and bright like that sun flower you speak of:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Alice Poésy]

Thank YOU for reading :). I can assure you sunflowers do make me smile! Thanks for stopping by. I'll be popping round your writings pretty soon :)

[Rahul]

having 'tis write quite one of my fav., i must consider it one of the very articulated works of today esp. when ur muse testifies: "... when adulthood meets childhood." that's quite perfect & very thoughtfully written. ah... i ain't knw that redheadeds r THAT gorgeous esp. when they swags 'pon words & whirl d CD of their thoughts so well. quite impressive.

guess, i mma smoke d weed of work now!

[Alice Poésy]

Those are huge compliments, Rahul! I can't thank you enough. I hope this gave you some inspiration :). Thank you for reading!

[Rahul]

for now, d elixir of ur reddish persona (existence) is seemed 2 b perfectly enough 2 beget d port of inspiration.

btw..nice meeting ya, doll.

[Chris]

A very melancholy mood you set. So few find "simple" wishes on their doorsteps anymore ...and yet so many hold them dearly inside.

[Alice Poésy]

Ah, I apologise! I do tend to set that mood. Indeed: The simplest things can be the dearest and most significant. It's so strange, the things that can touch the heart.

Thank you for stopping by!

[Matome Masipa]

this made my sunny day even brighter, i loved it

[Alice Poésy]

Glad I could bring you some more sun! Thank you for stopping by :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
we do appreciate a good season of rain........but......in the process.......amongst sweet smelling flowers........some wild flowers do bloom.......some weeds do grow...........
it sure is unwanted......but only natural.......

carefully crafted.....
beautiful poem.....
i loved it!!!
:)

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you so much for your beautiful words! And indeed, you are perfectly right.

Hope you're having a wonderful day! Thank you for stopping by :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

my pleasure........hope you are having a wonderful day too!!! :) :)