21/08/16

21/08/16

A Poem by Alice Poésy
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Fleeting Thoughts #1

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All the hotel receipts are fading
along with the structure of your face,
as I stay here pacing;
Your face melting in my hands.

© 2016 Alice Poésy


Author's Note

Alice Poésy
Just random thoughts while I'm going about life. Didn't really have the time to elaborate on it.

Also first thing posted on here!! I don't even know if I'm doing this right.

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ur "fleeting feelings" taste surprisingly quite gud. u must continue writing such juxtapositions of ur montage memories under "Fleeing Feel Diary" or as a Red Journal. it could be turn into somehing.. of courses as killer (beautious) as u r by now. not sure, if u r so much into writing novels or not but yeah... someday, u can think 'bout it too... u know.. 'bout turning such "fleeting 4way fatal feelings" in chapters.. in a gr8 novel.

kinda like ur work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Will do! I plan to post certain thoughts on here I want to "immortalise" :).

Thank yo.. read more



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Lovely work, Alice! You painted a wonderful picture with only a few words. I really liked this - it was a great read. I think it is fine without elaboration. (I tend to write poems based on random thoughts, as well. I often find that these become some of my favorites of the things I have written.)
Wonderful poem, a very nice read. Great work, Alice.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your wonderful words, Anastasia! Very kind :)
well pouring out your thoughts can never go wrong

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Indeed! Thanks for stopping by!
 wordman

8 Years Ago

my pleasure
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A short and enjoyable piece. Simple but expressive use of words. The random thoughts turned into small pieces of art; poems, are the best ones.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for a wonderful review, Vanessa! I'm glad you enjoyed it :).
Short, but expressive. Sadness seeps through these words.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your words! Means a lot :)
This was a short and sweetly wonderful piece of work.
Superb imagery! Every line coming together as clearly as they can, painting one hell of a portrait.
I genuinely loved this.
Fantastic work, and I look forward to reading more of your writing! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much, this is a wonderful review! Big fan of your work so it means a lot :)
Asante

8 Years Ago

You really are always welcome. :)
short and effective...........
powerful..........emotional.......
loved it!!!
:)
p.s. about doing it right..........i have no idea.........but this does flow perfectly for me.......

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

I can't tell you how much your opinion means to me! Thank you for reading and your lovely words :)
Pushkar Prabhat

8 Years Ago

my pleasure..........!!! :) :)
Strong imagery. Especially the second half. Nicely written!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much! That's incredibly nice :). Incorporating vivid imagery in my work is something I .. read more
Cyprian Van Dyke

8 Years Ago

You're most welcome! Me too. Keep up the good work!
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at poetry is nothing wrong
only what can happen you turn to be strong
you are the beautiful soul
At love and life
all is your and all is for us all


Posted 8 Years Ago


Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

What a beautiful comment. Thank you for sharing and reading :)
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8 Years Ago

I AM GLAD YOU LIKE IT. I LIKE YOUR POEM REALY LOT
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It is surprising what can inspire us to pen a poem, receipts eh, who'd have thought. Liked this

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Indeed! Thoughts are such strange creatures. Thank you for reading :)
Short xD I like short :) means less reading. I like it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Haha, I feel you! Long can be stunning but sometimes I feel like short and straight to the point get.. read more
Wølfy

8 Years Ago

I just loathe reading and writing xD so short is good for me.

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Added on August 21, 2016
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