ur "fleeting feelings" taste surprisingly quite gud. u must continue writing such juxtapositions of ur montage memories under "Fleeing Feel Diary" or as a Red Journal. it could be turn into somehing.. of courses as killer (beautious) as u r by now. not sure, if u r so much into writing novels or not but yeah... someday, u can think 'bout it too... u know.. 'bout turning such "fleeting 4way fatal feelings" in chapters.. in a gr8 novel.
kinda like ur work!
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8 Years Ago
Will do! I plan to post certain thoughts on here I want to "immortalise" :).
Thank yo.. read moreWill do! I plan to post certain thoughts on here I want to "immortalise" :).
Thank you for your advice and kind words! I actually am working on a series of short stories off here based on these thoughts and certain events. I'm not so sure about them for now, but I think they could have potential.
I'm so happy we crossed paths, Rahul! Your words are very encouraging :).
You are doing it right with the ability to capture life's moments in a few words. From reading the reviews, I glean an ending affair was your inspiration. However, I can see how this would also resonate with a person that travels more than being home. Write on!
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8 Years Ago
Indeed it can! Like I always say: The poem belongs as much to the writer as it does to the reader. W.. read moreIndeed it can! Like I always say: The poem belongs as much to the writer as it does to the reader. Whatever you make of it, that's what it is.
This is a great work, makes me think of something mysterious... It reads like someone is reminiscing love... I call these short poems in the form of "experimental work" and I keep them this way... One thought leads another and I can sense this one will lead your mind to another deeply meaningful work... A lovely write to start off...
Sincerely
Dhiman
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8 Years Ago
You are spot on with your interpretations, sir! I am very much enjoying your reviews!
.. read moreYou are spot on with your interpretations, sir! I am very much enjoying your reviews!
Experimental work - what a lovely term. Watch out, I might borrow it :D. I like calling these shorts ones 'fleeting thoughts' because they're so short, they're like thoughts that come and go quickly :).
Indeed, one thought does lead to another. In fact, everything I've posted here are very much related. They keep feeding off each other and reproducing.
ur "fleeting feelings" taste surprisingly quite gud. u must continue writing such juxtapositions of ur montage memories under "Fleeing Feel Diary" or as a Red Journal. it could be turn into somehing.. of courses as killer (beautious) as u r by now. not sure, if u r so much into writing novels or not but yeah... someday, u can think 'bout it too... u know.. 'bout turning such "fleeting 4way fatal feelings" in chapters.. in a gr8 novel.
kinda like ur work!
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Will do! I plan to post certain thoughts on here I want to "immortalise" :).
Thank yo.. read moreWill do! I plan to post certain thoughts on here I want to "immortalise" :).
Thank you for your advice and kind words! I actually am working on a series of short stories off here based on these thoughts and certain events. I'm not so sure about them for now, but I think they could have potential.
I'm so happy we crossed paths, Rahul! Your words are very encouraging :).
Doesn't seem to me as random thoughts....Maybe you can call them well-defined thoughts which have been in your mind for a very long time..
Very nice imagery and nothing needs elaboration, you have done quite well in expressing your thoughts.
Looking forward to read your other writings.
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8 Years Ago
Most likely: Thoughts that were simmering in the back burner of my mind for a long time and had just.. read moreMost likely: Thoughts that were simmering in the back burner of my mind for a long time and had just surfaced :).
Thank you for your kind words. And I look forward to reading yours :)
There is no doing this wrong as far as posting on the Café goes. Reviewing and replying good etiquette.
This is a fascinating concept. Could definitely be fleshed out a bit more.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you for stopping by and for your kind words.
True, it can! I do like to keep th.. read moreThank you for stopping by and for your kind words.
True, it can! I do like to keep them short, though, and leave the reader wonder and make up their own conclusion. I do use recurrent themes in my thoughts/poetry however, and they very well can be added together. I like to chunk my writings in concepts, if that makes any sense.
Isn't it curious how we and our minds react as our "focus" shifts? The "true" endings as we realize never-weres... or even never-wills
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Very curious indeed! It's so fascinating what can trigger certain things, and how urgent they feel, .. read moreVery curious indeed! It's so fascinating what can trigger certain things, and how urgent they feel, the demand to be poured out.
True words, indeed. Thank you for all your lovely reviews, Chris! Lovely to hear your thoughts and a delight to read :)
I think of Dali a bit & also something a customer used to say to me "When you stop moving you rust." Sometimes, although, rusting can be a good thing.
This is well-written. I enjoy the merger of thought & environment. Well done.
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8 Years Ago
Whoa, Dali! That's an honour. I hadn't even realised it, but yes, the melting face and his clocks :).. read moreWhoa, Dali! That's an honour. I hadn't even realised it, but yes, the melting face and his clocks :).
Wise words! Thank you for your review. It was a delight to read.
There's definitely something old but something pretty new; something borrowed and something very, very blue.
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