21/08/16

21/08/16

A Poem by Alice Poésy
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Fleeting Thoughts #1

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All the hotel receipts are fading
along with the structure of your face,
as I stay here pacing;
Your face melting in my hands.

© 2016 Alice Poésy


Author's Note

Alice Poésy
Just random thoughts while I'm going about life. Didn't really have the time to elaborate on it.

Also first thing posted on here!! I don't even know if I'm doing this right.

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ur "fleeting feelings" taste surprisingly quite gud. u must continue writing such juxtapositions of ur montage memories under "Fleeing Feel Diary" or as a Red Journal. it could be turn into somehing.. of courses as killer (beautious) as u r by now. not sure, if u r so much into writing novels or not but yeah... someday, u can think 'bout it too... u know.. 'bout turning such "fleeting 4way fatal feelings" in chapters.. in a gr8 novel.

kinda like ur work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Will do! I plan to post certain thoughts on here I want to "immortalise" :).

Thank yo.. read more



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No need to elaborate Alice, you nailed it oh' & for what its worth, you are doing it right. Write on my fine literary friend. All Good Things, N

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Neville, for the kind words! :)
Neville

8 Years Ago

My pleasure...........
A great snapshot of torturous longing. Your tone is en pointe and I particularly liked the emotional impact of the first two lines. Well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your wonderful review and kind words!
You are doing it right with the ability to capture life's moments in a few words. From reading the reviews, I glean an ending affair was your inspiration. However, I can see how this would also resonate with a person that travels more than being home. Write on!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Indeed it can! Like I always say: The poem belongs as much to the writer as it does to the reader. W.. read more
This is a great work, makes me think of something mysterious... It reads like someone is reminiscing love... I call these short poems in the form of "experimental work" and I keep them this way... One thought leads another and I can sense this one will lead your mind to another deeply meaningful work... A lovely write to start off...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

You are spot on with your interpretations, sir! I am very much enjoying your reviews!

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ur "fleeting feelings" taste surprisingly quite gud. u must continue writing such juxtapositions of ur montage memories under "Fleeing Feel Diary" or as a Red Journal. it could be turn into somehing.. of courses as killer (beautious) as u r by now. not sure, if u r so much into writing novels or not but yeah... someday, u can think 'bout it too... u know.. 'bout turning such "fleeting 4way fatal feelings" in chapters.. in a gr8 novel.

kinda like ur work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Will do! I plan to post certain thoughts on here I want to "immortalise" :).

Thank yo.. read more
Super idea, love the relation of the hotel receipts to the end of an affair perhaps?

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

You hit it right on the first try.

Thank you for stopping by. I very much LOVE your w.. read more
Papaya

8 Years Ago

You're welcome
Doesn't seem to me as random thoughts....Maybe you can call them well-defined thoughts which have been in your mind for a very long time..
Very nice imagery and nothing needs elaboration, you have done quite well in expressing your thoughts.
Looking forward to read your other writings.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Most likely: Thoughts that were simmering in the back burner of my mind for a long time and had just.. read more
There is no doing this wrong as far as posting on the Café goes. Reviewing and replying good etiquette.

This is a fascinating concept. Could definitely be fleshed out a bit more.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Thank you for stopping by and for your kind words.

True, it can! I do like to keep th.. read more
Isn't it curious how we and our minds react as our "focus" shifts? The "true" endings as we realize never-weres... or even never-wills

Posted 8 Years Ago


Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Very curious indeed! It's so fascinating what can trigger certain things, and how urgent they feel, .. read more
I think of Dali a bit & also something a customer used to say to me "When you stop moving you rust." Sometimes, although, rusting can be a good thing.

This is well-written. I enjoy the merger of thought & environment. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Poésy

8 Years Ago

Whoa, Dali! That's an honour. I hadn't even realised it, but yes, the melting face and his clocks :).. read more
PhoenixDown

8 Years Ago

You are most welcome.

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Added on August 21, 2016
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