The beginning of the end

Promise me... when the end comes...you won't miss me

Preface

 I never minded the thought of dying, in fact sometimes I seemed to welcome the idea of it. But until this moment that was all it ever was, an idea, I never really thought it would happen this soon, or this way.  I know that he counts on me that he loves me, but what he doesn't seem to understand is that I do love him, I love him with everything I have, with an intensity that scares me to my very core. I couldn't, no I wouldn't fathom a moment of my life without him in it. Saying something sarcastic, pulling his glasses off in his sexy way, raking his hands through his jet black hair, pinching the bridge of his nose, looking at me with his endless blue eyes. I think that this is what I'll miss the most, the little things he does that only I would notice. I would never hurt him, not intentionally, I know that this will be hard, but I know that he'll be fine without me, he'll move on and have a million babies with a pretty woman who will give him everything I never could...time.

Author's Note

I don't know if this is any good or not, but I think it could be! I would love some feedback, it's still really rough so any recommendations would be greatly appreciated ad valued! Thank you!!

Reviews

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

i like it, tooooooo many commas and work on your adjectives there's a whole imagination out there to pour words into not this same old "JET BLACK" nope what is YOUR description of how his hair truly is etc....

[MomzillaNC]

I think it's an intriguing beginning. Some of the details could use a bit more clarity. And, some of your sentences run on a bit. I also think a little more reason for the narrator's conundrum should be included.