Morning walk

I walk with angry steps

The car breaks as often as my promises do

A sidewalk sitting gentleman

We stare at each other with a gracious understanding

 

He can have my lunch

I’ll get a ride at two

A stroller passes the other way

Mother and daughter giving the same smile

 

Its 8 o’clock

The sun peaks over hardened hills

Sidewalk shadows run along my face

Shrinking ever smaller by the minute

 

I avoid the concrete cracks

Hands in my pockets

I never stop and smell the roses

I prefer jasmine

Reviews

[Tate Morgan]

this is interesting it is taken from real life i se and so imagination only tellls the tale A nice way to be I think

[Manda]

Wow this was pretty good, well done!

[Liza]

I want to know more about those angry steps....you left me longing to know why you woke up that morning....overall interesting write; leaving the reader wanting more.

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

your piece brings out strongly determination to be focussed Alex.....congratulations

[Tina Kline]

Very nice well written poem capturing a moment or two in time as we move along with this gentleman experiencing with him what he is experiencing.

[David C. Landers]

It has a nice flow to it, which definitely keep the writing moving. It's interesting how the character, though so pessimistic, still stops to help the needy, or perhaps it's so he can feel better about himself. :p

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

this is a beautiful piece

[Tainted Devotion]

I love how simple this poem is. It picks out the simple things in life, and shows just how much we miss daily. You did a lovely job with this poem indeed. I like just how basic it seems to be, and it's not overly complicated when reading it. It's just a very nice and simple poem. Love it. :)

[Millionth Muse]

Wow, very nicely done! I love the conversational and matter of fact nature of this piece, which really speaks to a "moment in time". Too many poets don't understand the importance of "simplicity", and this poem is a perfect example of why being overly wordy isn't as good as being to the point. I'm impressed with your style.

[Saturn's Lover]

This is very well written. I love your word usage and descriptions of daily life. It just flows really well, the ending to me is perfect.