So.
I wrote this in a couple of minutes.
I really just had an emotion, and went with it. So to me, it seems a bit rushed.
I wanted to capture how two people are in a love/hate relationship, and how despite everything, they are never are the same page, but can never leave the other.
I wanted to depict stubborness as well.
Tell me what you think.
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Alex, each poem I read of your's I get more impressed, and jealous. Kidding about the jealous, but envy yes, and happy, that you are able to convey your thoughts and feelings in such ways, that are poignant, and memorable. Like your other writing, there are nuances of brilliance in this piece throughout.
Wonderfully done, you should be very proud.
Antonio
Alright,
well, once again, not particularly in my usual interests, but a very good poem none the less. If I'm correct in my interpretations of it (and I'm quite sure that I am, given your insights into it in your Author's Note,) I believe a good many people can relate to it, and it would make a good set of lyrics, rushed or not. Sometimes things end up better when you don't think about them, and you just go with it.
this was so wonderful..i read so many love poems..countless,but this is very different in a very special way
always women humbling themselves,and giving to their love in any way he wished..then they would look so lovely..ever
use me as you desire and i will never run or leave..even if you left ,i am always hiding in your pocket,wherever you go
i stick to you like i did with my mother,just could not live without either of you
i want to forget everything but your eyes..those i could never live without them
i want to be etched forever in your skin,i live in you,wrap me within you
this could never be any lovelier than this..the choice of words and the feeling,is so nice
i really loved this
lovely write..
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