Pearls that Strangle

 

I call you love, you call me lover

How are you today dear?

Would you like me to help you push your dagger into my chest?

I can whisper to you the secrets that lead to my demise

You just have to sacrifice a kiss, or two

Use me how you desire, but know I will never run or leave you

Even when you think you have left me behind in your path

I will always be hiding in your pocket

Your heart may be cold, but I will feel it's beat

I will cling to it like I clinched to my mother's hand so many years ago

You call me pathetic, I call you sweetheart

You ask how sane am I, I ask when has sanity ever been truly present?

You secretly adore my antics

Make it so all I can remember is your name

I want to forget everything else

But your eyes...they are your downfall

They expose your wounds, your joy, your love

They make me remember what you did

I want to be forever etched in your skin

I'll live in you

Wrap me up within you

You call me love, I call you lover

Author's Note

So.
I wrote this in a couple of minutes.
I really just had an emotion, and went with it. So to me, it seems a bit rushed.

I wanted to capture how two people are in a love/hate relationship, and how despite everything, they are never are the same page, but can never leave the other.
I wanted to depict stubborness as well.

Tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Antonio Valentino]

Alex, each poem I read of your's I get more impressed, and jealous. Kidding about the jealous, but envy yes, and happy, that you are able to convey your thoughts and feelings in such ways, that are poignant, and memorable. Like your other writing, there are nuances of brilliance in this piece throughout.

Wonderfully done, you should be very proud.
Antonio

[Cleide Tatyana Almeida]

I enjoyed this, from the title right down to the last line...It depicts love-hate tragedy relationship quite well. It is sad, the aspect of one-sided lover. I love the line 'I call you love, you call me lover'

[J.M]

A very impressive contrast of love and hate, adoration and pain. It was also great the way the end echoes the beginning but in reverse.

[Samantha]

Very emotional, and hit home for me. The words etched a mental picture into my head, more of memories i may dare say. Beautiful arrangment and word choice. Kind of short, but very meaningful. Excellent work. It is a beautiful peice of writing. Thank you for sharing!

[tora]

this was excellent awesome work

[Tate Morgan]

The eyes always say what the lips will not
Great
tate

[nightmask]

sounds like a masochistic couple awesome wording very emotional :] at the end it kinda sounds like the guy in the relationship is actually a knife she uses to cut her self I really like the line "I want to be forever etched in your skin" good job! :D

[Sean M. Addams]

i thought this was an impressive write the emotions are expressed well through out this piece... overall very nice job on this!!!

[PaperHearts]

'I call you love, you call me lover' is an amazingly inspired line! I love how something so simplistic as the visual difference between the word 'love' and 'lover' can have such a drastic meaning in life. You really captured the concept of this one line from every possible angle, and I felt like each line in your poem was important in portraying each of these different angles.
I loved the title of this piece too. Nice work,
~PaperHearts :D

[Alisa_the_fluff_ball]

Love the conflicting emotions, your words flow effortlesly in this poem, like a dream....

I love you.

--Alisa_the_fluff_ball