Dreamstate

There is a boy beyond the clouds in the sky

With wings black as death that help him fly

Last I saw him, he flew away with my heart

Whenever he visits, its beat starts

His wings enclose me; with him I am whole

He whispers I am an angel, from higher above then he could ever attempt to hold

I will spend eternity with him, encased in his wings

 

 

When woken from this dream of longing and hope,liquid descends from my eyes

His wings do not lift me up, they make me fall to my demise

I must escape from this dream that will never come true

For my eyes are blinded by this bittersweet lie that my mind clings to

There can be no more dreaming like a girl so in love

He can never be my reality; I cannot be with him above

The angel of death is not as alive as my dreams make him to be

Author's Note

Eh.
Tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Antonio Valentino]

Alex, this poem is layered with many crossroads that can go many ways, a true sign of good writing. A love apart is the sweetest sorrow that the state of dreams we all live in will embrace and fight to not let go. Just be careful, and ready, with your wishes. Sometimes they do come true.

Fantastic write.
Antonio

[Lexi Nicole]

Oooh, very nice write! I love how you bolded certain words. The whole piece has a nice feel to it and the imagery is great! Nice work! ^^

[Alisa_the_fluff_ball]

Lovely, mysterious, so many adjectives I could use to describe the beauty of your words.

--Alisa_the_fluff_ball

[TinyCitiesMadeOfAshes]

I'm feeling it, I'm feelin' it. Not really my style, but I'm still feelin' it.

[PaperHearts]

A very intriguing write! Such mystique and such beauty! :D
I loved the imagery you created in this piece, and thought that the bold words were really effective.
You had one spelling mistake in the first line of the second stanza...'decends' should be 'descends'. :P
This was a fantastic write! For me in particular, it made me ponder the thought that perhaps we all have our own angels of death, and we all live, constantly struggling between our hoped-for-dreams, and our accepted reality.
Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[Sean M. Addams]

very well done .. your words really are visual in this... very well expressed... liked this alot... awesome job on this!!!

[Fallin Angel]

i love it, it spoke to it made me think about my own life how like to live in my dreams its to the point your poem even made me teary-eyed

[deeps]

I like this, I found this full of emotion. I thought it was very well written as well.
I like how you have words highlighted in Black. I like this wonderful expressions here.

[prjctREdiscovery]

I like it, paradoxical and good.