The Rabbit Hole

Lay it down, lay me down

Down the rabbit hole, no coming back again

Save the body! Save the brain!

Mentality is forever lost

Rock-a-bye baby, falls from the tree top

Cracks in my foundation begin to crumble

Far enough for distractions, close enough to sting

Poison flows, I'm left alone

The doctor refuses antidote

Selfishness deserves

'No more weeping, you'll make your eyes swell'

A baby cries, and I die

Isolation, seperation, exasperation, there is no destination

Darkness ensues, light is too pure for the person of me

Without my heart, my soul has escaped me

The rabbit hole is the only place for me

 

 

Author's Note

I wrote this to to get the emotions off my chest. Please tell me what you think.

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

Definitely an intriguing write! I liked the depth and abstraction of this piece, and also the strength and punchiness of the emotions that you conveyed. Your poem flowed really well, and I liked the feeling of motion and progression within your piece. The imagery that you created was amazing, and I thought that you captured the concept of the Rabbit Hole really well.
~PaperHearts

[Sean M. Addams]

very deep piece ... thought it was well done and flowed together nicely... nice job on this!!!

[deeps]

I really enjoyed this write here,
This is a well written write, it flowed wonderfully.

[Adeline]

I especially like the line: "Isolation, separation, exasperation, there is no destination"
nice internal rhymes there, I like this a lot